Talk:Lady & Peebles

GA Review

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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 01:51, 8 January 2014 (UTC)
Nominator: Gen. Quon (Talk)

Hi! I'll be reviewing this article for GA status, and should have my full review up shortly. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 01:51, 8 January 2014 (UTC)

1: Well-written

• a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
• b. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

WP:LEAD:

Check for WP:LEAD: Check for Correct Structure of Lead Section:  Done Check for Citations (WP:LEADCITE):  Done Check for Introductory text:  Done Check for Provide an accessible overview (MOS:INTRO):  Done Major Point 1: Plot "The series follows the adventures of Finn (voiced by Jeremy Shada), a human boy, and his best friend and adoptive brother Jake ... has trapped them and wishes to marry Bubblegum." (not a concise summary of the Plot section, it ends abruptly at "wishes to marry Bubblegum") Major Point 2: Production "The episode was written and storyboarded by Cole Sanchez and Rebecca Sugar, from a story by Patrick McHale, Kent Osborne, and Pendleton Ward." & ""Lady & Peebles" featured the return of Takei, ... Eternal Darkness: Sanity's Requiem and the 2010 game Amnesia: The Dark Descent. " (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 3: Reception " "Lady & Peebles" was watched by 2.754 million people and received largely positive critical attention." (not a concise summary of the Reception section) Check for Relative emphasis:  Done Major Point 1: Plot "The series follows the adventures of Finn (voiced by Jeremy Shada), a human boy, and his best friend and adoptive brother Jake ... has trapped them and wishes to marry Bubblegum." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 2: Production "The episode was written and storyboarded by Cole Sanchez and Rebecca Sugar, from a story by Patrick McHale, Kent Osborne, and Pendleton Ward." & ""Lady & Peebles" featured the return of Takei, ... Eternal Darkness: Sanity's Requiem and the 2010 game Amnesia: The Dark Descent. " (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 3: Reception " "Lady & Peebles" was watched by 2.754 million people and received largely positive critical attention." (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body) Check for Opening paragraph (MOS:BEGIN):  Done Check for First sentence (WP:LEADSENTENCE):  Done "Lady & Peebles" is the nineteenth episode of the fourth season of the American animated television series Adventure Time. (Lady & Peebles should be in bold) Check for Format of the first sentence (MOS:BOLDTITLE):  Done Check for Proper names and titles:  Done Check for Abbreviations and synonyms (MOS:BOLDSYN): None Check for Foreign language (MOS:FORLANG): None Check for Pronunciation: None Check for Contextual links (MOS:CONTEXTLINK):  Done Check for Biographies: NA Check for Organisms: NA Check for Biographies of living persons: NA Check for Alternative names (MOS:LEADALT):  Done Check for Non-English titles: Check for Usage in first sentence: Check for Separate section usage: Check for Length (WP:LEADLENGTH):  Done Check for Clutter (WP:LEADCLUTTER): None

WP:LAYOUT:

Done Check for WP:LAYOUT:  Done Check for Body sections: WP:BODY, MOS:BODY.  Done Check for Headings and sections:  Done Check for Section templates and summary style:  Done Check for Paragraphs (MOS:PARAGRAPHS):  Done Check for Standard appendices and footers (MOS:APPENDIX):  Done Check for Order of sections (WP:ORDER):  Done Check for Works or publications:  Done Check for See also section (MOS:SEEALSO): None Check for Notes and references (WP:FNNR):  Done Check for Further reading (WP:FURTHER): None Check for External links (WP:LAYOUTEL): None Check for Links to sister projects: None Check for Navigation templates:  Done Check for Formatting:  Done Check for Images (WP:LAYIM):  Done Check for Links:  Done Check for Horizontal rule (WP:LINE):  Done

WP:WTW:

Done Check for WP:WTW:  Done Check for Words that may introduce bias:  Done Check for Puffery (WP:PEA):  Done Check for Contentious labels (WP:LABEL):  Done Check for Unsupported attributions (WP:WEASEL):  Done Check for Expressions of doubt (WP:ALLEGED):  Done Check for Editorializing (MOS:OPED):  Done Check for Synonyms for said (WP:SAY):  Done Check for Expressions that lack precision:  Done Check for Euphemisms (WP:EUPHEMISM):  Done Check for Clichés and idioms (WP:IDIOM):  Done Check for Relative time references (WP:REALTIME):  Done Check for Neologisms (WP:PEA): None Check for Offensive material (WP:F***):  Done Check for WP:MOSFICT:  Done Check for Real-world perspective (WP:Real world):  Done Check for Primary and secondary information (WP:PASI):  Done Check for Contextual presentation (MOS:PLOT):  Done

WP:EMBED:
None Prose is preferred over list (WP:PROSE): Check for Tables (MOS:TABLES):

2: Verifiable with no original research

• a. Has an appropriate reference section: Yes
• b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary: excellent (Thorough check on Google. Cross-checked with other GAs)

WP:RS:

Done Check for WP:RS:  Done Cross-checked with other GAs: Adventure Time, Adventure Time (pilot), Adventure Time (season 1), Adventure Time (season 2), Adventure Time (season 3), Adventure Time (season 4), Adventure Time (season 5). Referred one pending FL for rough verification - List of Adventure Time episodes. Check for the material (WP:RSVETTING): (not contentious)  Done Is it contentious?: No Does the ref indeed support the material?: Check for the author (WP:RSVETTING):  Done Who is the author?: The Futon Critic Kenny, Tom (Actor) (Cartoon Network) Sava, Oliver (The Onion) Jones-Quartey, Ian (Formspring) Cory, Robertryan (Flickr) Bibel, Sara (Zap2it) Amazon.com Whittaker, Richard (The Austin Chronicle) Entertainment Examiner King, Susan (Los Angeles Times) Does the author have a Wikipedia article?: What are the author's academic credentials and professional experience?: What else has the author published?: Is the author, or this work, cited in other reliable sources? In academic works?: Check for the publication (WP:RSVETTING):  Done Cartoon Network The Onion Formspring Flickr Zap2it Amazon.com The Austin Chronicle Check for Self-published sources (WP:SPS):

WP:MINREF:

Done Check for inline citations WP:MINREF:  Done Check for Direct quotations:  Done "the valentine from Hell".[2] (Check on source 2, inaccessible) "always welcome on this series, largely due to Takei’s delightful voice work."[3] (Check on source 3, successful, "Ice King’s anthropomorphized heart voiced by George Takei is always welcome on this series, largely due to Takei’s delightful voice work.") "there’s a theatrical smarminess to his vocals that is a stark contrast to the Ice King’s nasality" ...[3] (Check on source 3, successful, "There’s a theatrical smarminess to his vocals that is a stark contrast to the Ice King’s nasality,") "Takei always sounds like he’s having a great time reading the ridiculous lines that are written for him."[3] (Check on source 3, successful, "and Takei always sounds like he’s having a great time reading the ridiculous lines that are written for him. ") "dominates this episode" ... [3] (Check on source 3, successful, "Princess Bubblegum dominates this episode, whether she’s shooting explosive rounds out of the Ball-Blam-Burgler-Ber or beating the shit out of Ricardio. ") "episode reveals a side of her that we rarely see, and hopefully we’ll get more of badass PB in the future."[3] (Check on source 3, successful, "PB’s response: “You didn’t.” This episode reveals a side of her that we rarely see, and hopefully we’ll get more of badass PB in the future.") "memorable" ... [10] (Check on source 10, inaccessible, subscription required) "Storyboarding in an Animated Television/Broadcast Production" ... [11] (Check on source 11, successful, Storyboarding in an Animated Television/Broadcast Production ... Cole Sanchez, Rebecca Sugar ‘Adventure Time: Lady & Peebles’ – Cartoon Network Studios) Check for Likely to be challenged:  Done Check for Contentious material about living persons (WP:BLP): NA

• c. No original research:  Done

WP:NOR:
Done Check for primary sources (WP:PRIMARY):  Done Check for synthesis (WP:SYN):  Done Check for original images (WP:OI):  Done

3: Broad in its coverage

a. Major aspects:

Done Cross-checked with other GAs: Adventure Time, Adventure Time (pilot), Adventure Time (season 1), Adventure Time (season 2), Adventure Time (season 3), Adventure Time (season 4), Adventure Time (season 5). Referred one pending FL for rough verification - List of Adventure Time episodes. Check for Article scope as defined by reliable sources: Check for The extent of the subject matter in these RS: Check for Out of scope: Check for The range of material that belongs in the article: Check for All material that is notable is covered: Check for All material that is referenced is covered: Check for All material that a reader would be likely to agree matches the specified scope is covered: Check for The most general scope that summarises essentially all knowledge: Check for Stay on topic and no wandering off-topic (WP:OFFTOPIC):

b. Focused:
Done Check for Readability issues (WP:LENGTH): Check for Article size (WP:TOO LONG!):

4: Neutral

WP:NPOV:

Done 4. Fair representation without bias:  Done Check for POV (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for naming (WP:POVNAMING):  Done Check for structure (WP:STRUCTURE):  Done Check for Due and undue weight (WP:DUE):  Done Check for Balancing aspects (WP:BALASPS):  Done Check for Giving "equal validity" (WP:VALID):  Done Check for Balance (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Impartial tone (WP:IMPARTIAL):  Done Check for Describing aesthetic opinions (WP:SUBJECTIVE):  Done Check for Words to watch (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Attributing and specifying biased statements (WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV):  Done Check for Fringe theories and pseudoscience (WP:PSCI): None Check for Religion (WP:RNPOV): None

5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes

6: Images  Done (Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license)

Images:

Done 6: Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:  Done Check for copyright tags (WP:TAGS):  Done Image 1 (George Takei by Gage Skidmore.jpg): This file is licensed under the Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license. This version permits free use, including commercial use. Hence this image complies with The license must permit both commercial reuse and derivative works. Check for copyright status:  Done Image 1 (George Takei by Gage Skidmore.jpg): Free. Check for non-free content (WP:NFC): None Check for valid fair use rationales (WP:FUR): NA 6: Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:  Done Check for image relevance (WP:IMAGE RELEVANCE):  Done Image 1 (George Takei by Gage Skidmore.jpg): Relevant. Check for Images for the lead (WP:LEADIMAGE): None Check for suitable captions (WP:CAPTION):  Done Caption: "The episode marked the return of George Takei as Ricardio." succinct and informative

As per the above checklist, the issues identified are :

• The lead does not provide an accessible overview for the Plot and the Reception sections
• The lead does not give relative emphasis to the Reception as is given in the body .
• Lady & Peebles should be in bold in the first sentence of the lead .
• 1a issue: "investigate an mysterious black ice cave" in the Plot .

This article is a very promising GA nominee. I'm glad to see your work here. I'm putting the article on hold. All the best! --Seabuckthorn ♥ 19:12, 11 January 2014 (UTC)

Thank you for the review. How do these edits look?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 01:31, 12 January 2014 (UTC)

Good. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 01:52, 12 January 2014 (UTC)

OK, everything looks good now. Passing the article to GA status. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 01:52, 12 January 2014 (UTC)