Talk:Lady Gaga/Lead

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OK, what parts of the article need adding to the lead in your opinion? — R² 19:24, 8 June 2009 (UTC)

Proposed lead

According to me the LEAD should be like this:

Stefani Joanne Angelina Germanotta (born March 28, 1986), better known by her stage name Lady Gaga, is an American theatrical musician, performance artist and dancer. After receiving a degree in music from New York University, Gaga was signed to music label Interscope Records where she worked as a songwriter penning music for then established artists. One of them was singer-producer Akon. During the same time, she began to play her music in clubs throughout New York City. After Akon recognized that Gaga also had vocal talent, he signed her to a joint deal with his own label, Kon Live Distribution whence then she started to work on her own new material for her debut album.

Gaga started to work with a collective called the "Haus of Gaga" in 2008 and released her debut album The Fame, which she explained was "about how anyone can feel famous." The album peaked in countries like United Kingdom and Canada while being critically appreciated. To date, the album has spawned the international number one singles "Just Dance" (nominated for Best Dance Recording at the 51st Grammy Awards) and "Poker Face." After performing as the supporting act for New Kids On The Block and Pussycat Dolls, Gaga started her own headlining The Fame Ball Tour.

Gaga has been influenced by Fashion and has been appreciated for her provocative sense of style and being influential to other celebrities. Musically she is inspired by glam rockers such as David Bowie and Queen as well as pop singers like Michael Jackson and Madonna. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 04:10, 9 June 2009 (UTC)

• comment This is fine, but I have made some alters to your own. My proposed lead.
• comment - This version gives too many examples of artists she has written for, I'm not even convinced we need to name the specific artists at all. whence then she started to work on her own new material for her debut album is poorly written line. The fact that it peaked at #1 in Ireland does not need a mention in the lead. in 2009 and was added to the BBC Sound of 2009 longlist - really not that important. After being the supporting act for this is awkward wording. Everything else seems fine. The general lay out is good. — R² 14:02, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

Made some minor changes, shall we add it? --Legolas ^(talk2me) 04:05, 17 June 2009 (UTC)

I'll get back to you on that soon. — R² 04:17, 17 June 2009 (UTC)

Stefani Joanne Angelina Germanotta (born March 28, 1986), best known by her stage name Lady Gaga, is an American theatrical musician,dancer and performance artist. After achieving a degree in music from New York University, Gaga was signed a record deal with Def Jam but was later dropped. She then joined Interscope records where she worked as a songwriter penning music for then established artists and groups such as New Kids on the Block (NKOTB), Britney Spears , Pussycat Dolls (PCD) and Fergie, as well as American singer and producer Akon. At the same time she started performing in New York Clubs. Akon recognized that Gaga also had vocal talent, he signed her to a joint deal with his own label, Kon Live Distribution, and then she started work on her own new material for her debut album.

Gaga started to work with a collective and creative production team called the "Haus of Gaga," and released her debut album The Fame in late 2008 and early 2009, which she explained was "about how anyone can feel famous." The album peaked in countries such as the United Kingdom, Canada and Ireland and was critically appreciated. To date, the album has spawned the international number one hit singles "Just Dance" (nominated for Best Dance Recording at the 51st Grammy Awards) and "Poker Face." After being the supporting act for NKOTB and PCD, Gaga started her own headlining The Fame Ball Tour in 2009 and was added to the BBC Sound of 2009 longlist.

Gaga has been influenced by fashion and has been appreciated for her provocative sense of style and being influential to other celebrities. Musically she is influenced by glam rockers such as David Bowie and Queen as well as pop singers like Michael Jackson and Madonna. Hey Boys and Girls (Welcome to the Show…) ° 06:46, 9 June 2009 (UTC)

Comment: What I suggest is that it would be more preferable if some wording was replaced or rearranged so that we can better the grammar:

• First of all in the second sentance, words "getting" in the top version and "achieving" in the bottom version should be replaced with the word "receiving."
• Instead of, "Gaga joined" we should use "Gaga was signed to music label, Interscope Records"
• Where it states: "At the same time she started performing in New York clubs" the sentace should be changed to "During this, she began to play her music in clubs throughout New York City"

• вяαdcяochat 07:47, 9 June 2009 (UTC)

Good job. Changed. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 08:57, 9 June 2009 (UTC)

Aggreed, it was only minor tweaks anyway. Well Done! Hey Boys and Girls (Welcome to the Show…) ° 05:00, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

• Comments - released her debut album The Fame in late 2008 and early 2009 no need to mention early 2009, it was first released in 2008, that's all that matters. Again, no need to mention Ireland. After being the supporting act bad wording. in 2009 and was added to the BBC Sound of 2009 longlist - really not that important. — R² 14:08, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

I agree. The original time of release is only what should be noted in the LEAD. If readers wish to look at the entire release history, they can do so in visiting the article for The Fame.
• вяαdcяochat 05:57, 11 June 2009 (UTC)

 Done by user Bradcro. - We are the crowd -- We're c-comin' out *Paparazzi* Lady Gaga 04:15, 20 June 2009 (UTC)