Talk:Lasioglossum hemichalceum
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editThis article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Mmc7777. Peer reviewers: Wdsieling, VAD2015.
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editGreat work! I changed a lot of Lasioglossum hemichalceum to L. hemichalceum. I made some grammar correction like in Morphology where I got rid of “that are” from “that are often off-white in color” and adding mm to some numbers to help make it clearer. I added commas and hyphens and fixed grammar in the distribution and habitat section, colony cycle section, kin selection, and variable pupae nutrition section. I also linked L. zephyrum especially since another classmate worked on that! Other things I changed were “mothers-son relationships” to “mother-son relationships”. But overall great job. Raymundo.marcelo (talk) 18:23, 4 December 2015 (UTC)
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editThis was a very well written article. There was nothing that was need dramatic fixing. I added hyperlinks for Australia, New South Wales, Victoria, Queensland, eusocial, and haplodiploid. I rally like how you went in depth about kin selection.VAD2015 (talk) 22:52, 1 October 2015 (UTC)
Thank you so much Victor! I really appreciate your edits, and taking the time and patience to enhance my article. Adding the additional links definitely improved the quality of the article! Mmc7777 (talk) 02:37, 4 December 2015 (UTC)
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editOverall, I thought this article was well balanced in terms of the facts you researched and how the information was presented. The behavior and kin selection sections were very strong, and the genetic relatedness subsection was particularly thorough. Great job! This article is very complete, and there aren’t many areas to critique. The only suggestion I can think of is to cut down on the information in the introduction as it repeated later in the article. The relationship between the size of the colony and the reproductive potential is a great way to catch the reader’s attention and fits well in the introduction however! This article is also well referenced, and the references are placed numerously and appropriately.
I edited several aspects of the article, including grammar, spelling, organization, and structure, and content. I added a picture of the range of where the species are commonly found from Discover Life.
I fixed some spelling and grammar, such as capitalizing the species names that you list in the taxonomy and phylogeny section. This article was fairly thorough in terms of spelling and grammar, and thus I did not make many corrections. Further, the full name “Lasioglossum hemichalceum” was used throughout the article, but it is also appropriate to use the shortened version “L. hemichalceum” so I substituted this when possible.
Structurally, I added the name of the person who discovered the species and the year of discovery in parenthesis right after the first mention of the species. I also went through and added a lot of hyperlinks to important words and phrases, in case the reader wants to learn more about certain topics. Kevin.george1 (talk) 04:42, 2 October 2015 (UTC)
Thank you Kevin.george1! I really appreciated the comments that you made. I went ahead and changed “Lasioglossum hemichalceum” to “L. hemichalceum” wherever it was possible, to make the article shorter and more concise, as you recommended. I also proofread the article again to ensure that all grammar and spelling were correct, and that the sentences flowed well. In addition, I trimmed the introduction down (as you recommended) so that there is less repetition, and readers do not have to waste their time reading the same information twice. For example, I removed the senteces “Lasioglossum hemichalceum consume nectar and pollen,” and the changed the original sentence “L. hemichalceum is a communal species of bee,[1] who's genetic relatedness varies depending on the members' relationships with one another” to “The genetic relatedness of L. hemichalceum members varies depending on their relationships with one another.” Thank you so much! Mmc7777 (talk) 02:38, 4 December 2015 (UTC)
Great job with this article on Lasioglossum hemichalceum. I thought it was well balanced with its information and very thorough in each section. I made a very minor change in the section on Agonistic Behavior, changing "Aggressive behavior" to "Agonistic behavior" as to keep in style with the rest of that section as this was the only place aggressive was used in the place of agonistic when the two terms are rather synonymous. I think it would be great to add in the future a section on interspecies interactions, such as common predators or parasites and how this species responds to predation. Wdsieling (talk) 23;50, 2 October 2015 (UTC)
Thank you Wdsieling! Taking the time and effort to carefully read my article and ensure that all terms/vocabulary are consistent throughout the article is immensely helpful. This will definitely will improve the quality of the article as a whole. Unfortunately, very little information is available on interspecies interactions or parasites and predators of the L. hemichalceum, so I will refrain from creating a new section pertaining to this topic area. However, if any new information becomes available I will consider making the change.Mmc7777 (talk) 02:38, 4 December 2015 (UTC)
Australian seasons are not the same as Europe/North America
editThe article says, "Colony initiation starts late in the month of November and typically ends in the early spring, around February or April, after females have overwintered.[6]" However, it also says that the bee is endemic to Australia.
In Australia, February and April are not spring, but autumn. Which statement is wrong? IAmNitpicking (talk) 20:55, 24 October 2019 (UTC)