Talk:Last Tango in Halifax/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 14:17, 3 March 2014 (UTC)

Comments very well written article.

• Most obvious is the missing plot synopses for episodes 3 to 6 of series 2.
• Consider merging the single-sentence third lead paragraph with the fourth lead paragraph as they're discussing similar topics.
• "but they never expressed " no need for second "they" here.
• "Discussing the casting of Derek Jacobi and Anne Reid..." not sure you need repeat these actors first names since you've already mentioned them above. This seems to happen a few times thereafter.
• Ditto "actor of Sir Derek Jacobi's calibre" who suddenly has his knighthood included too!
• "and Paul Copley[14])" ref outside the parenthesis.
• Ronnie Ancona should be Ronni Ancona.
• "series began filming in July 2013." presumably by now we know when it stopped filming?
• "The" in The University of York is not required to be within the wikilink.
• " an old romantic interest " you mean a former interest?
• "Ronnia Ancona" see above.
• "who have lost mobile phone signal" ->"both of whom have no mobile phone signal"?
• No reason to capitalise Accident and Emergency.
• "This episode shows, between the end of the episode and the closing credits, a dedication to ..."->"Between the end of the episode and the closing credits, a dedication to ... is shown."
• Avoid hash to represent number.
• Graph of viewing figures is okay, but should be enhanced to include series 2, and shouldn't have the "Series1" legend. Also, caption for graph is incomplete sentence so no need for a full stop.
• "7.480 million" be consistent with the accuracy, and check you have non-breaking spaces between the numbers and the word "million" each time.
• "In September 2013, the series began airing on the American broadcast television network PBS.[32]" any feedback, viewing figure info?
• "7.480 million[25])" ref after parenthesis.
• AfterEllen or After Ellen? Be consistent. And in the prose it's not italicised, but it is italicised in the refs.
• Daily Mail is usually considered to be not a WP:RS...
• Huffington Post is The Huffington Post.
• Ref 25 is missing parameters such as retrieval date.

A few issues to resolve so I'll put it on hold for a week. The Rambling Man (talk) 09:26, 5 March 2014 (UTC)

I have covered most of the typographical ones, as the nominator appears to be absent at the moment. Keith D (talk) 19:07, 6 March 2014 (UTC)

Thanks, but no synopses have been added for the "missing episodes", suggest those are fixed before this is renominated. The Rambling Man (talk) 20:53, 12 March 2014 (UTC)