Talk:Lazarus (Travie McCoy album)

GA Review

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Reviewer: AJona1992 (talk) 20:17, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

General notes

Lead

• 01. "Lazarus is the debut album by Gym Class Heroes frontman Travie McCoy" - do you mean "lead singer"?  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 17:41, 10 July 2011 (UTC)
• 02. "Upon the album's release, Lazarus debuted at number 25 on the U.S. Billboard 200 chart with sales of 15,000 copies" - Number 25 needs to be spelled out completely (number twenty-five) per WP:ORDINAL. And link Billboard 200 and not just Billboard.  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 17:41, 10 July 2011 (UTC)
• 03. Link Billboard Hot 100.  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 17:41, 10 July 2011 (UTC)
• 04. Wasn't Billionaire a lead single? Comment: Yes indeed. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:55, 12 July 2011 (UTC)
• 05. "The songs "Need You" and "We'll Be Alright" have also been released as singles." - promotional singles or promotional recordings?

Comment: I am not sure what the difference is, the two links redirect to the same page. What do you mean? Basilisk4u (talk) 17:41, 10 July 2011 (UTC)

• 06. "positive to mixed" to "mixed to positive"  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 17:41, 10 July 2011 (UTC)
• 07. Per WP:Lead which states "The lead serves both as an introduction to the article and as a summary of its most important aspects". Please consider adding the major aspects of the article.

Secondary notes

Lead

Number four hasn't been addressed. I am pretty sure it was the lead single (especially if it was the first single released). Number five; I see where you are coming from. What I meant was, were these promotional singles or just singles? (there is a difference).

Comment: I think that they were just singles, as they were released several months after the release of the album and they were not released to create a buzz for the album. Is that okay? Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)

Background

• 01. "while Gym Class was on the road promoting its 2008 album The Quilt." - remove "its 2008 album" and add the year of release to The Quilt in (parenthesis).  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)
• 02. 808s & Heartbreak - year of release should also be in (parenthesis)  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)

Recording and production

• 01. "1994 debut album Southernplayalisticadillacmuzik." - per above, remove "1994" and replace it in (parenthesis)  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)

Music

• 01. "Speaking of the album, McCoy stated" - sounds a bit ORISH to me. Would wanna consider revising, so it doesn't sound like you are in an interview.  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)
• 02. "The album's opener" ---> "The album's opening track"  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)
• 03. Ahhha! so Billionaire was the lead single. You would want to include that in the lead per WP:Lead.  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)

Lyrics

• 01. "escapism" - wiktionary this ---> escapism  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)
• 02. "nostalgic" - wiktionary this as well ---> nostalgic  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)

Packaging and title

• 01. The album artwork ---> The album's artwork  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)

Release and promotion

• 01. "He plans to tour extensively to promote the album in order to" - this sentence needs to be written in past-tense tone.  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)

Chart performance

• 01. "Billboard Hot 100 at 92" - link Billboard Hot 100 and spell out completely "at number ninety-two" per WP:ORDINAL.  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)
• 02. "number 25" - needs to be spelled out "number twenty-five"  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)
• 03. "peaking at number 25" - per above.  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)
• 04. "number 11 on the Billboard Digital Albums charts" - spell out the number --> "number eleven"  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)
• 05. "at number 69, its peak position thus far" - consider rewording and peaked at number sixty-nine.  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)
• 06. "reaching a peak of 4" - consider rewording peaked at number-four  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)
• 07. "The song was listed number 6" - consider rewording The song was positioned at number-six  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)
• 08. "and peaked at number 36" - spell the number out completely ---> "number thirty-six"  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)

Critical reception

• 01. "generally positive to mixed" - consider rewording generally mixed to positive.  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)
• 02. The Papercut Chronicles - needs the year of release in (parenthesis)  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)

Chart performance

• 01. Needs references.  Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)

Final notes

This article needs a bit of help. I am going to put it  On hold for further development, up to seven (7) days. Please address the concerns that were stated. Take care and good luck, AJona1992 (talk) 16:30, 11 July 2011 (UTC)

Thank you for your suggestions! I believe I have addressed everything. Please let me know if there is anything else I should do. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for your fast response! I'm currently going to re-read the article to make sure that everything has been taking care of, AJona1992 (talk) 03:09, 12 July 2011 (UTC)

Chart performance

• 01. "number 11 on the Billboard Digital Albums charts" - number 11 needs to be spelled out ---> number eleven.

This is the only concern. Just fix this and the article passes, AJona1992 (talk) 03:24, 12 July 2011 (UTC)

Done :D Basilisk4u (talk) 03:28, 12 July 2011 (UTC)

Passed the article. Congrats! AJona1992 (talk) 03:31, 12 July 2011 (UTC)

Awesome! Thanks so much :) Basilisk4u (talk) 01:00, 13 July 2011 (UTC)