Talk:Leaving Through the Window/GA1

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 16:43, 4 April 2020 (UTC)

Infobox

• Fine

Lead

• Audioboxer EP → year of release
• Drive-Thru's distributor → their label distributor
• Warped Tour → years the tour ran in between brackets
• Billboard 200 → Billboard 200
• with comments on its length and frontman Andrew McMahon's vocals. → negative, positive comments? Needs to be more specific
• Since it is mixed reviews, add something positive as well.

Background

• You C Jordan".[11] later that month. → remove the first full stop
• "Throughout November, the group toured the California coast, the Midwest and southern states of the US with Reel Big Fish, Sugarcult, Lucky Boys Confusion, River City High, and Riddlin' Kids.[15] Touring continued into December, with the group visiting the east coast." → how is this relevant?

To give context to what the band was doing in the timespan between the release of the Audioboxer EP and recording for Leaving. I shortened it but I wouldn't object to removing it entirely if you'd prefer? Yeepsi (talk) 17:44, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Thanks. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:09, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Production

• The first paragraph lacks a source in the end
• Any informating regarding the studio where it was mixed?

Not mentioned in the liner notes. Yeepsi (talk) 17:44, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Composition

• with which to expand song structures → to expand song structures
• "I Want to Save You".is → remove full stop
• It and "If I Were a Terrorist, → are you refering to "If You C Jordan" or is missing a track here?

Release

• Warped Tour → years in between brackets the tour ran
• Where was "If You C Jordan" released?

I think the UK, to coincide with the UK tour earlier that month, but the source doesn't say. Yeepsi (talk) 17:44, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Reception

• Remove the first metion of source "25", the latter wil be more than enough
• Same for "ChartAttack"
• You go back and forth with the positive and negative reviews. It is usually done with postive, mixed and negative
• In the beggining of the reviews, before AllMusic, needs a sentence summing up the revies. Such as "Leaving Through the Window received mixed response from music critics." → link music critics to music journalism

Track listing

• Fine

Personnel

• Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between the Personnel and the credits.

Charts

• Fine

References

• All Music, Buzz Feed, MTV and Punknews.org are publisher, not work
• Violation from a site that copied wiki, so it's fine.

Overall

• There is one source here that could be used to improve the article. Why wasn't used?
• You can now address the issues. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:26, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Done. Yeepsi (talk) 17:44, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

@Yeepsi: I left you a comment in the lead, it will be promoted aftewards.

Added! Yeepsi (talk) 18:12, 5 April 2020 (UTC)