Talk:Lee Guetterman/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:24, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

Am reviewing for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 19:24, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

General

• I believe all uses of the word "majors" should be changed to "major leagues"

Lead

• "Drafted by the Mariners in the in the fourth round of the 1981 Major League Baseball (MLB) Draft," - the text in bold is a repetition
• "before getting moved to the bullpen due to a loss of control." - loss of control of what?
• I think the lead could be three paragraphs instead of two; how about making the new paragraph after he became unhappy with his playing time
• "though he was in the minor leagues until June 30." - add that year to the end of this sentence for clarification

Early life

• "Arthur Lee Guetterman was born November 22, 1958, to Arthur Adam Jr. and Ruth Guetterman.[1][2]" - the first citation can be moved to the comma because it does not mention his parents
• "Arthur Lee Guetterman was born November 22, 1958," - born on November 22,
• "where he was coached on the baseball team by former major league pitcher Al Worthington.[4][3]" - refs in numerical order please

First full season, use as a starter (1986–87)

• "16 of his 41 appearances for Seattle" - don't start a sentence with a digit
• Wikilink bullpen to the relevant article

Emerging as a relief pitcher, closing, leading the Yankees in wins (1988–90)

• "because of an injury to Ron Guidry." - The LA Times said Guidry's injury was to his left elbow
• "Sure enough, Righetti went on to assume the closer role" - use alternative formal wording in place of the text in bold or delete it
• Wikilink go-ahead home run to the relevant article
  • Home run is already linked on first mention. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 17:51, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

Dissatisfaction with workload, trade to the Mets (1991–92)

• "then earned ones in back-to-back appearances July 1 and 4," - achieved saves in back-to-back appearances on July 1 and 4,
• "As it turned out," - transpired
• "in a 2016 interview." - interview with whom?
  • No interviewee is shown in the video, but I don't think that's relevant here - the main point of this sentence is that in 2016, Guetterman thought New York was his favorite place that he had played. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 17:54, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

Various organizations (1993–97)

• "Guetterman was then unemployed for over a month before signing with the Mariners again on August 8." - more than a month
• "earning the save (his only one of the season) in the victory." - earning him his sole save of the season in the victory
• "when Tim Davis broke his leg." - The Spokesman-Review says it was his left leg that was broken
• "Blas Minor then relieved him and retired Rex Hudler to end the inning." - subsequently
• "finally getting a chance to start again." - reword this sentence slightly

Career statistics and pitching style

• "Guetterman threw a curveball as well.[19][14]" - refs in numerical order please

Personal life

• "due to the preaching and spiritual study he received while a Liberty student. "I made that commitment at Liberty."[19][3]" - refs in numerical order please

References

• Reference 51 should mention the agency

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 15:06, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

• @Sanfranciscogiants17: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 19:31, 15 October 2020 (UTC)