Talk:Lei'd in Hawaii

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November 30, 2021Good article nomineeListed
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on December 9, 2021.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that the Beach Boys played a concert in Hawaii while high on LSD?

Brian Wilson not performing "Heroes And Villains" again until A TNT Tribute? Really?

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There are plenty of concert recordings from the '70s and early '80s of the Beach Boys -- including Brian -- performing the song. I see that Domenic Priore is the cited source for the incorrect information. He's a nice guy and very enthusiastic about Brian Wilson and the California sound in general, but sometimes you need to take him with a grain of salt. 208.7.62.77 (talk) 21:34, 26 April 2016 (UTC)Reply

According to a report I once read, in the 1970s and 1980s, Brian always left the stage during performances of "Heroes and Villains". I defy you to find any of those concert recordings where he's present.--Ilovetopaint (talk) 23:41, 26 April 2016 (UTC)Reply

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:50, 25 November 2021 (UTC)Reply


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Live album for once! --K. Peake 09:50, 25 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Infobox and lead

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  • Remove the default cover from the infobox, as that is for example pages rather than albums with no actual cover
  • The HIC Arena is not sourced anywhere in the body
  • Wikilink live album
  • "by the American rock band" → "by American rock band" with the pipe
  • "of their 1967 release Smiley Smile." → "of their 12th studio album, Smiley Smile (1967)."
  • Remove [1] from the lead since not only is that sourced in the body, but refs are discouraged here
  • "Monterey Pop Festival in June." → "Monterey Pop Festival the following month."
  • "in late August, the band's" → "in late August 1967, the Beach Boys'"
  • Remove the first shows part since it's not notable for the lead
  • Add a sentence directly after the Wilson one mentioning that however, Bruce Johnston declined to appear at the shows, so the para is a decent length of four sentences
  • "the group arranged their songs in a similar minimalist style as" → "the band arranged their songs in a minimalist style similar to" with the pipe
  • Pipe Baldwin organ to Baldwin Piano Company
  • "Their set-list included several of their past" → "The Beach Boys' set-list included past"
  • Pipe singles to Single (music)
  • "in September, the band" → "in September 1967, the band"
  • "as a live-in-the-studio album with the intention of inserting" → "as a live album in the studio, intending to insert" to be less repetitive with the body
  • "The project was" → "Lei'd in Hawaii was"
  • "their next album, Wild Honey." → "their next studio album, Wild Honey (1967)."
  • Start the last para with a sentence about the critical reception for Lei'd in Hawaii
  • Write reissues instead of box sets since the former is sourced in the body

Background

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  • The img text is not of any relevance; either reword or replace the img
  • "The band's concerts in" → "Their concerts in"
  • "while a sell-out, received" → "while selling out, were met with"
  • "had bestowed upon the group" → "had bestowed upon them" because they are a band and changing to "them" may seem to be about other shows
  • "In June, Brian Wilson" → "In June 1967, Brian Wilson"
  • Remove comma before Smile and add the release year
  • "The band also announced" → "The Beach Boys also announced"
  • "they focused on" → "the band focused on" and add the album's release year
  • Pipe rock n' roll to Rock and roll
  • "Brian's 2016 memoir" → "Brian Wilson's 2016 memoir" per MOS:SAMESURNAME
  • "Rumors that the band" → "Rumors that the Beach Boys"

Live performances

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  • Img looks good!
  • "to play the" → "to play at the"
  • "appearance from Brian Wilson," → "appearance from Wilson," per him being the most recent person of the surname mentioned
  • "felt that the band's situation" → "felt that the Beach Boys' situation"
  • Remove usage of "the" prior to NME
  • Pipe Baldwin organ to Baldwin Piano Company
  • "Doe adds that Wilson's" → "Doe adds that Brian's" per MOS:SAMESURNAME (another Wilson is mentioned here)
  • Add surnames of Carl and Alan using [], as this is the first time that either of them are mentioned
  • "stated that the occasion," → "stated that the performances,"
  • "their venue, Brian responded," → "a venue, Brian Wilson responded," since Carl is the most recent Wilson to be mentioned
  • "We wanted to another..." it looks like the word do is either missing from the quote or needs to be inserted using []
  • "It would have been the band's" → "It would have been their"
  • Wikilink live album outside of the quote per MOS:LINKSTYLE
  • "speculated that a" → "speculates that a"
  • "Smiley Smile album."" → "Smiley Smile album"." per MOS:QUOTE
  • "show the group" → "shows the band"
  • "their wives and girlfriends."" → "their wives and girlfriends"."
  • "The group reconfigured" → "The Beach Boys reconfigured"
  • Are you sure "the engagement" is an appropriate term here?
  • "included several of their past hits," → "included several past hits," to avoid overusage of their
  • "and the Box Tops'" → "and a cover version of the Box Tops'"
  • "Footage of the band performing" → "Footage of them performing"
  • Add the release year of "God Only Knows" in brackets
  • Wikilink Radio City Music Hall, keeping pipe to An All-Star Tribute to Brian Wilson only on the text after the hall name
  • "the group decided that the recordings were" → "the Beach Boys decided that the set was"
  • "wrote that the band" → "wrote that they"

Studio sessions

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  • Pipe Wally Heider Recording to Wally Heider Studios
  • "September 29 as the band" → "September 29, as the band"
  • Isn't the song titled "The Game of Love"? Either way, add the release year in brackets
  • Pipe overdubbed to Overdubbing
  • Pipe spoken-word to Spoken word
  • "of what became" → "of what became the Beach Boys' 13th studio album" and add the release year
  • Remove wikilink on the Beatles

Release

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Critical reception

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  • "way with swing."" → "way with swing"." per MOS:QUOTE
  • "wrote that the studio sessions" → "said that the studio sessions"
  • Put more of Priore's review into your own words per WP:QUOTEFARM
  • Pipe Pitchfork to Pitchfork (website)
  • Wikilink the Who
  • Pipe Uncut to Uncut (magazine)
  • The Mike Love mention is not notable for the above review

Set list and tracks

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References

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  • The ref is not needed after the note since it is also at the end of the sentence in the body
  • Copyvio score looks solid at 24.2%!!!!
  • Is ref 4 really needed when all of those pages are included for ref 5 already?
  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 8
  • Wikilink Da Capo Press on ref 10
  • WP:OVERLINK of The Honolulu Advertiser on ref 12
  • Remove the publisher from ref 15
  • Is ref 17 really needed when all of those pages are included for ref 20 already?
  • Wikilink Rolling Stone on ref 19 instead of ref 23, though mark both with url-access limited
  • Wikilink AllMusic on ref 22 instead of ref 24
  • Pipe Uncut to Uncut (magazine) on ref 26 and remove it from the title
  • Pipe Backbeat Books to Rowman & Littlefield

Final comments and verdict

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  •   Done A few suggestions were not heeded because they didn't make sense (ex. adding a release year for Smile) or I wasn't sure how to implement them (ex. adding a note about critical reception to lead without it being WP:SYNTH). ili (talk) 20:22, 27 November 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • ILIL I must have not noticed the unfinished part during the review, but you can mention what critics mostly praised/criticized about the album without giving an overall consensus if you are trying to avoid WP:SYNTH; what else did you not implement? --K. Peake 07:53, 28 November 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • @Kyle Peake:   Done I've added a statement about critical perspective in the lead. I did not remove the detail about the concerts being the first to feature Brian Wilson since 1965 because I thought that it was indeed lead-worthy. It was highly unusual for a rock group to tour without their frontman in the 1960s, and this occasion marked Wilson's last appearances in concert for the decade. ili (talk) 19:37, 28 November 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • I can't do that because the claims corresponding to ref 3 (Badman pp. 188-190) aren't the same claims corresponding to ref 16 (Badman p. 199). If what you're actually suggesting is to combine the citations into "Badman pp. 188-190, 199", then I'm not sure why being less specific with sources would be an improvement. ili (talk) 08:53, 29 November 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • As I've explained, the relevant text simply corresponds to different pages of the book. There's a relatively sizable amount of detail spread across the pages. Ref 3 pertains to details about their Monterey cancellation (May–June 1967) and ref 4 pertains to the subsequent recording and release of Smiley Smile (June–September 1967). I could have combined every sfn template into "Badman pp. 183-201" but then the reader would be forced to peruse 18 pages just to find the one sentence that would support the claim they're trying to verify. ili (talk) 21:30, 29 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Did you know nomination

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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Vaticidalprophet (talk14:38, 3 December 2021 (UTC)Reply

Improved to Good Article status by ILIL (talk). Self-nominated at 03:31, 1 December 2021 (UTC).Reply

  •   Article was nominated within 7 days of passing GAN; meeting of GA criteria implicates DYK pass. Article is well written and adequately cited. QPQ has been completed. Only pings on Earwigs are for cited quotes and some longer song titles. Hook is cited, interesting, and short enough for DYK. Morgan695 (talk) 06:03, 1 December 2021 (UTC)Reply