Talk:Let's Get Down (Bow Wow song)/GA1

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Reviewer: IndianBio (talk · contribs) 09:57, 1 June 2015 (UTC)

Lead

• Let's Get Down" is a song by American rapper Bow Wow. Released on June 24, 2003, it's the first single off his third album Unleashed (2003). --> You can combine both of them, no need to short sentences
• First talk about the songwriters then talk about the song producers
• Also talk about the album Unleashed and whether its the first single from it etc.
• his highest charting single on that chart until 2005's "Like You" and "Let Me Hold You" made it his third-highest charting single --> Simply "his highest charting single on that chart until 2005's "Like You" and "Let Me Hold You" is enough.
  •  Done DepressedPer (talk) 23:21, 1 June 2015 (UTC)

Background

• The big quote about dropping Lil', consider using the <blockquote> template.
• The song was written by Shad Moss, Phalon Alexander, Rahman Griffin and Clifford Harris (aka T.I.) --> The song was written by Shad Moss, Phalon Alexander, Rahman Griffin and Clifford Harris (aka then-unknown T.I.)
• "I wanted something that was going to hit hard, Bow Wow says of the single. "I also wanted to do a song with Baby. Actually, Baby wasn't going to be on that song. He was suppose to be on another song, but he hopped on 'Let's Get Down' because he was feeling it. After that, everything just came together." --> The quote needs to be replaced with passive voice writing, too much of quotes in a section
• Bow Wow's third album --> Which album is that?
• Even on the single, "Let's Get Down." I wrote the third verse and the hook --> Single quotes for song names within a blockquote and quotation ends before period
• Again a big block of quote that can be perfectly summarized in words
• Why is Tip bolded?
  •  Done DepressedPer (talk) 23:21, 1 June 2015 (UTC)

Critical

• Bow Wow for maturing as an MC concluding with, "While Bow Wow's more --> Bow Wow for maturing as an MC. He added that "[w]hile Bow Wow's more
• 2004 New York Music Awards --> comma after Awards
  •  Done DepressedPer (talk) 19:19, 1 June 2015 (UTC)

Chart

• It peaked at number 14 for the week of September 20, 2003. It stayed on the chart for seventeen weeks --> It peaked at number 14 for the week of September 20, 2003 and was present on the chart for a total of seventeen weeks
• until 2005's "Like You" and "Let Me Hold You" made it his third-highest charting single. --> Same as Lead section
• This also gave Birdman his fourth top 40 hit on that chart --> The song was also Birdman's fourth top 40 hit on that chart
• Can you eliminate the usage of "also" so many times
  •  Done DepressedPer (talk) 19:19, 1 June 2015 (UTC)

Other sections

• Jazze Pha makes a cameo appearance in the video. The video made its premiere on June 30, 200 --> continuous usage of the video
• The bulleting needs to go, track lists already have the numerals generated for them
• The album liner note reference for credits section requires the album tracking ID
• Use rowheader=true in the {{singlechart}} templates for the Weekly charts
  •  Done DepressedPer (talk) 19:19, 1 June 2015 (UTC)

On hold for seven days for improvements. —Indian:BIO ^{[ ChitChat ]} 09:57, 1 June 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for the prompt action, passing now. Congratulations. —Indian:BIO ^{[ ChitChat ]} 06:56, 2 June 2015 (UTC)

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