Talk:Let Me Sleep Beside You

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Kyle Peake in topic GA Review
Good articleLet Me Sleep Beside You has been listed as one of the Music good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Article milestones
DateProcessResult
February 23, 2022Good article nomineeListed
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on February 15, 2022.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that David Bowie's 1967 composition "Let Me Sleep Beside You" was rejected as a single due to its suggestive title?

Did you know nomination

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The result was: promoted by Theleekycauldron (talk07:40, 9 February 2022 (UTC)Reply

  • ... that David Bowie's "Let Me Sleep Beside You" was his first collaboration with producer Tony Visconti? Source: Pegg, Nicholas (2016). The Complete David Bowie (Revised and Updated ed.). London: Titan Books. p. 157. ISBN 978-1-78565-365-0.
    • ALT1: ... that David Bowie's 1967 composition "Let Me Sleep Beside You" was rejected as a single due to its suggestive title? Source: Cann, Kevin (2010). Any Day Now – David Bowie: The London Years: 1947–1974. Croyden, Surrey: Adelita. p. 116. ISBN 978-0-9552017-7-6.

Converted from a redirect by Zmbro (talk). Self-nominated at 16:35, 1 February 2022 (UTC).Reply

General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
  • Cited:   - Offline/paywalled citation accepted in good faith
  • Interesting:  
QPQ: Done.

Overall:   Eligible (expanded redirect), article is well cited, well-written, formatting correct, Earwig says no copyvio and qpq done. The hook is interesting. Unfortunately I will have to AGF on the DYK citation, but this user appears to have a very good track record. LunaEatsTuna (talk) 05:27, 2 February 2022 (UTC)Reply

ALT1 to T:DYK/P2

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 19:31, 15 February 2022 (UTC)Reply


Good Article review progress box
Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

I'm back from my few days away, so now's the time to start a new review! --K. Peake 19:31, 15 February 2022 (UTC)Reply

Infobox and lead

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  • Infobox looks good!
  • The release info should come between the recording and departure sentences
  • Pipe singles to Single (music)
  • ""Let Me Sleep Beside You" displays a" → "the song displays a"
  • Both done
  • A celli arrangement is sourced in the body, not strings
  • "The track was rejected by Deram" → "The song was rejected by Deram"
  • Done
  • "has seen release on compilations and reissues." → "has seen release on numerous albums." because it has been released on more than one of both
  • Done
  • "The song was also featured" → "A remixed version of the song was featured"
  • The publications part should be the second sentence of the second para instead, also add ones included
  • "entire Toy album as part" → "entire Toy album, as part"
  • Done
  • "The remake was positively received." add why it is praised

Background and recording

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  • Img looks good!
  • Add the release year of his self-titled debut album
  • Pipe singles to Single (music)
  • "turned it down but suggested" → "turned an offer down, but suggested"
  • Remove pipe on single since this should have been done earlier in the para
  • Above four done
  • Use something other than for to start the second sentence of the second para, to be less repetitive
  • Done

Composition

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  • Retitle to Composition and lyrics
  • Done
  • The celli wikilink leads to a disambiguation page; fix this if it is kept, which I'm not sure of since the lead says strings?
  • Pipe chord to Chord (music)
  • "such as "Let Me Sleep Beside You" and "Be My Wife"" → "such as 'Let Me Sleep Beside You' and 'Be My Wife'"
  • Both done

Release and aftermath

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  • Any context for the quote?
  • "they requested he change" → "they requested that Bowie change"
  • Done
  • "The Stones, also a Decca artist," → "The Rolling Stones, also under Decca," since calling a band an artist makes no sense
  • I can't see the source, so I'm asking is it correct to state BBC sessions here when only one is specified or does the source say there was multiple ones?
  • Fixed
  • "and argues that it" → "and arguing that it"
  • "and impersonating Mick Jagger." → "and impersonating Jagger."
  • "cut of the film but was" → "cut of the film, but was"
  • "a more folk-inspired version of the track with" → "a more folk-inspired number with" to be less wordy
  • "called it superior to Bowie's entire debut album and acknowledged its sound" → "called the song superior to Bowie's entire debut album and acknowledged the sound"
  • Above five done

Toy version

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  • Sure
  • "along with other tracks Bowie wrote" → "along with other tracks he wrote"
  • Wikilink EMI
  • Both done

Personnel

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  • Good

Notes

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  • What warrants the inclusion of note b when that album is not mentioned in the article?

References

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  • Done
  • Done
  • MOS:CAPS issues with ref 29, unless that is how Toy can be stylized

Sources

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  • Good
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  • Good

Final comments and verdict

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Thanks for reviewing Kyle. Have a busy weekend ahead so I can't get to this til Tuesday at the least just so you're aware. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 16:37, 17 February 2022 (UTC)Reply