Talk:Let Me Try/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Aoba47 in topic GA Review

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 02:57, 8 February 2018 (UTC)Reply

  • Grabbing this for a review if that is okay with you. As an American who knows next to nothing about Eurovision, I look forward to reading this and hopefully learning more about it. Aoba47 (talk) 02:57, 8 February 2018 (UTC)Reply
Lead and infobox
  • I do not believe that the reference in the caption for the first infobox image is necessary.
 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:17, 9 February 2018 (UTC)Reply
  • Barrels does not need to be linked.
 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:17, 9 February 2018 (UTC)Reply
  • I am not sure what is meant by this phrase “fellow light effects” so please revise with better word choices.
 Done I replaced this with a quote and an accompanying reference. This is the best way here, I think. Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:17, 9 February 2018 (UTC)Reply
Background and promotion
  • This sentence construction (According to Anghel, she and Sistem promoted the song “intensely”) is rather awkward so I would revise this part.
 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:17, 9 February 2018 (UTC)Reply
  • I would paraphrase this quote "won the public's sympathy” with your own words.
 Done Hope this is better now... Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:17, 9 February 2018 (UTC)Reply
  • Again, barrels does not need a link.
 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:17, 9 February 2018 (UTC)Reply
Reception and accolades.
  • I would revise this part (Although viewed more negatively by the Romanian media prior to the Eurovision Song Contest, "Let Me Try” received positive reviews from music critics afterwards.) to (Although Romanian media initially negatively responded to “Let Me Try”, the song received positive reviews from music critics after the Eurovision Song Contest.)
 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:17, 9 February 2018 (UTC)Reply
  • I would paraphrase this quote "a plus of originality” with your own words.
 Done Hope it's better now... Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:17, 9 February 2018 (UTC)Reply
  • I am confused by this part (led to proposals from the Netherlands, Hungary, Germany and England). Proposals for what?
I mean proposals to record and release things through the labels in the named countries. Is there a special term for this? Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:17, 9 February 2018 (UTC)Reply
National selection
  • Move the image to the left to avoid having the person look off the page.
 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:17, 9 February 2018 (UTC)Reply
  • Include ALT text for the image.
 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:17, 9 February 2018 (UTC)Reply
  • For this part (after the votes of a twelve-member professional jury pane), “twelve” should be “12”.
 Done My fault... Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:17, 9 February 2018 (UTC)Reply
  • For this part (were negated by both), “denied” is a better word than “negated” in this context.
 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:17, 9 February 2018 (UTC)Reply
In Kiev
  • No further comments here
Points awarded to Romania
  • No further comments here
Credits and personnel
  • I would imagine a section like this would be necessary
We only have writing and production credits, which makes me hesitant about creating such a section. Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:30, 9 February 2018 (UTC)Reply
Final comments
@Aoba47: Hi! Thank you again for your review! I've responded to your comments. Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:17, 9 February 2018 (UTC)Reply
Verdict
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