Talk:Liberté-class battleship/GA1

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Reviewer: MathewTownsend (talk · contribs) 21:43, 8 October 2012 (UTC)Reply

Alright, I'll review this to add to my collection! MathewTownsend (talk) 21:43, 8 October 2012 (UTC)Reply

Hi,

I've made the following edits which you're free to change.[1]

Those all look fine to me. Parsecboy (talk) 22:20, 11 October 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • "was a group of four pre-dreadnought battleships of the French Navy. The class comprised Liberté, the lead ship, Justice, Vérité, and Démocratie." - not readily clear why only three visited the US.
    • None of the sources say why, so I'd prefer not to speculate.
  • "Two years later, Liberté's forward magazines exploded in Toulon harbor, destroying the ship and killing approximately 250 of her crew." -why does the body of the article continue after the "The explosion aboard Liberté killed some 250 officers and men.[8] The wreck was left in Toulon until 1925, when it was raised and broken up for scrap."?
    • I don't know that I follow. Are you asking why Liberte's ultimate fate isn't in the lead?
  • "after the revolutionary British HMS Dreadnought," - after the revolutionary design of the British HMS Dreadnought?
    • I don't think there's a problem with calling the ship revolutionary versus its design - isn't the design part implied in the first? The sentence is already fairly wordy, and I don't really want to make it longer.

GA review-see WP:WIAGA for criteria (and here for what they are not)

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  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
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    b. it remains focused and does not go into unnecessary detail (see summary style):  
  4. Does it follow the neutral point of view policy.
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  5. Is it stable?
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  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    a. images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:  
    b. images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:  
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:  
    Pass!