Talk:Light on Yoga/GA1
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 22:27, 14 October 2019 (UTC)
Opening statement
editIn reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use Done,
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Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. —♠Vami_IV†♠ 22:27, 14 October 2019 (UTC)
This was almost a Quick Pass from me, but I think there are some additions to be made to the article. They are detailed below. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 22:27, 14 October 2019 (UTC)
- Many thanks for taking this on, and for the kind words. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:42, 15 October 2019 (UTC)
Broadness and prose
editCould you discuss what yoga is in "Context"?
- Somewhat like trying to define Jazz...
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- Somewhat like trying to define Jazz...
What language was the book first published in? I assume English, but the article doesn't tell me.
- Yes.
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- Yes.
MoveThe yoga scholar Mark Singleton [...]
into the first paragraph of "Reception".
- Moved and merged with his other comments. Or we can mention him both under Illustrations and under Reception, as you like.
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- Moved and merged with his other comments. Or we can mention him both under Illustrations and under Reception, as you like.
The yoga teacher Bernie Gourley [...]
This sentence is golden as a transition from praise for the book to criticism of it.
- Thank you.
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