Talk:Lionel Palairet/GA1

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Reviewer: Sahara4u (talk · contribs) 04:39, 27 December 2012 (UTC)

Lede

• In the infobox you mentions "underarm", what does this means?

• It means he sometimes bowled using an underarm style, described in the linked article. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• "In 1892, they shared a partnership of 346 for the first wicket, an opening partnership that set a record for the County Championship and remains Somerset's highest first-wicket partnership." → "partnership" 3 times in the sntence, you may rephrase this.

• Changed one instance from "partnership" to "stand". Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• the "Five Batsmen of the Year" → why is this in quote?

• In 1893, rather than name their Cricketers of the Year, Wisden entitled it Five Batsmen of the Year. This has since been recognised as being one of the Cricketers of the Year selections, but given it is a variant title, I placed it in speech marks. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• "....remained the record score for a Somerset batsman until 1948." → remained a record for a Somerset batsman until 1948.

• Changed as suggested. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

University and county cricketer

• "Palairet scored six and zero and took one wicket...." → How can one score "zero" runs? You may rephrase this.
• Somerset that season played thirteen matches and won twelve of them and tied the other. → 13 and 12

• MOS:NUM says that single word numbers can be written as words, it's personal preference. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• "Palairet played in ten of these matches and one his first appearance, scored a century against Leicestershire." → something is wrong with the sentence, I think it should be "on" instead of "one"?

• Yep, changed to "on". Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• "county across his ten county matches was 31.11, placing him among the top ten batsmen..." → 10

• As above. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• "Palairet used himself heavily as a bowler for the university in 1892; only George Berkeley bowled more deliveries." → needs ref

• Added. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• ...who had injured himself fielding,.... → during fielding?

• Tweaked. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• "Although their record has since been beaten in first-class cricket,..." who broke the record, you may add a note.

• It's been beaten lots of times, I don't think it justifies a specific note. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• .....and claimed the only five-wicket hauls of his career. → "took" as you have already used "claimed" in the sentence.

• Changed as suggested. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• Link not out

• Linked. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

Leading amateur batsman

• "...., on the latter occasion carrying his bat;" → "carrying his bat" needs explanation.

• It's linked to an article which explains it. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• ....a thousands runs... → 1,000

• As above. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• for Somerset he scored six and zero → Same as above for zero
• "an average just below thirty," → 30.00

• As above. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• "In 1898, Palairet topped 1,000 first-class runs...." topped with 1,000

• That would change the meaning of the sentence. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• Is this "Headlingley" or "Headlingley"?

• Corrected link. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• ".....Somerset's second innigns, each scoring a century." → innings

• Fixed. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

Later county career

• In 1903, Palairet played eleven first-class matches. → 11

• As above. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• "...during a ten wicket loss to ..." ten-wicket?

• Changed as suggested. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• "...against the touring Australians; Kent and Warwickshire,.." → I think semi-colon after Australians should be a comma.

• Changed as suggested. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• eleven eligible players for some → 11

• As above. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• he played ten or more matches, → 10

• As above. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

Style and technique

• "He was a sure-handed catcher, occasional wicket-keeper, and medium-paced or lob bowler." needs ref

• Removed. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

Notes and ref

• As of November 2012 → December

• Updated. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

• ref# 64 is not formatted correctly, there may be others

• Sorted that ref, the rest are all fine. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

Images

• All the images need alt text.

• Added. Harrias ^talk 07:23, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

Good work with the article, I'll visit again as the above concerns resolve. Thanks, Zia Khan 03:46, 28 December 2012 (UTC)

Final review

GA review (see Wikipedia:Good article criteria and WP:GACN)

1. Well written.

   a (clear and concise prose which doesn't violate copyright laws, grammar and spelling are correct): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, and fiction:

2. Factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (well referenced): b (citations to reliable sources): c (Wikipedia:No original research):

3. Broad in its coverage.

   a (covers major aspects): b (well focused):

4. Neutral .

   Fair representation, no bias:

5. Stable.

   No edit wars nor disputed contents:

6. Illustrated appropriately by images.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Result: No issues for now, I guess. Well done and keep it up! Zia Khan 16:45, 29 December 2012 (UTC)

   Pass/Fail: