Talk:Little blue heron/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 16:53, 21 December 2022 (UTC)Reply

Happy to review the article.

Review comments

Lead section / infobox

Brazil (in the infobox) doesn’t need to be linked. Similarly, in the lead section, unlink Americas, United States; South America; eggs; fish; animals (see MOS:OL).
Fixed
Consider amending salt to ‘salt water’.
Done
Improve the prose by amending on young to ‘on young birds’.
Done
The map key needs to have orange added.
Done
Link Linnaeus; range (Species distribution).
Linnaeus is linked in both the infobox and body. I did the second.

1 Etymology

Can the text from this section (there is very little) be put elsewhere, perhaps even in a note?
Done
Unlink English; Spanish (common terms).
Done

2 Taxonomy

Unlink all countries and continents here and throughout the article (see MOS:OL).
Done
Spelling variants – I’m unclear why this term is used, as the words are not differently spelt. Amend to ‘Variations of the name’?
Done

2.1 Hybrids

This small subsection doesn’t need its own title.
Fixed

3 Description

Consider linking coloration (Animal coloration).
Done
Link primaries (Flight_feather#Primaries).
Done
Little blue herons are relatively small. Is this needed? The dimensions are provided later on the in the section.
Removed
Dusky – can a better description be used (e.g. ‘somewhat dark in color’)?
Done
In addition to the aforementioned changes to the color of the head – is redundant text, and should be edited out.
Done
Be consistent when linking colours (e.g. turquoise is linked but not maroon).
Links for both, as it seems plausible enough that a reader would find them useful.

4 Distribution and habitat

Link vagrant (Vagrancy (biology)); range (Species distribution).
Done

5 Behavior and ecology

Unlink fish.
Done
I would add a comma after when hunting.
Done
It sometimes - ‘They sometimes’? (for the sake of consistency)
Done

5.1.1 Mating

See MOS:PARA for why I am saying this subsection is too short to have a title.
Removed

5.1.2 Nesting

Link incubate (Egg incubation).
Done
They typically – it’s a Wikipedia thing, but ‘Little blue herons typically’ is preferred here.
Done
colonial nester – the term could be briefly explained here to help readers who might be unfamiliar with it.
Done
I would combine the short paragraph that begins Clutch sizes .... with the one above it.
Done

5.2 Predation

the birds fled – it needs to be clearer which birds are being referred to here.
Fixed
There is an unaddressed GA1 comment - “Why aren't parasites and predation under the 'threats' section?” that needs to be sorted. I think the text is better off being moved to Threats.
That was deliberately left unaddressed, as the article only describes recorded parasites and does not state that they are harming little blue heron populations. I would like to avoid WP:SYNTH.

5.3 Parasites

helminths (parasitic worms) – why not remove helminths and simply link parasitic worms?
Done
Improve the prose by amending examined little blue herons in South Florida to ‘little blue herons, examined in South Florida’
Done except the comma, as I think it would read a little better without it.
I would add a comma after Posthodiplostomum macrocotyle.
Done
I would consider combining this paragraph with the one above it, and renaming the title.
I understand your point and agree that it would look better overall, but I don't see any justification for doing so, as the two subjects are very different.

5.4 Prey

Link mangrove forest.
Used earlier so I linked there instead.
they primarily – ‘little blue herons primarily’.
Done

6 Conservation

The video clip would be imo better on the right (the head is then pointing inwards, and the image does not interfere with the titles in the text (MOS:IMAGELOC).
Done
(IUCN) – there is no need for this abbreviation to be included, as it does not reappear in the text.
Removed

6.1 Threats and 6.1.1 Competition

These single paragraph subsections do not need titles.
Removed

7 Bibliography

This section should be positioned below the References section, not above it.
Fixed
As the sources are not cited in the text, they should either not appear in the article, or the section should be named Further reading .
Done
Not GA, so not vital for this review, but the sources in this section are not formatted consistently, something that many editors would expect in a GA.
I didn't add this section, so I have no idea where these books came from (I'm having a hard time finding some). I could just remove them if you think it's for the best.

Yes, I would remove them, they seem very general in nature, and probably won't much to the article. Amitchell125 (talk) 20:51, 27 December 2022 (UTC)Reply

On hold

I'm putting the article on hold for a week until 4 January to allow time for the issues raised to be addressed. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 09:45, 27 December 2022 (UTC)Reply

Amitchell125, I have done as you suggested for nearly all of these. An anonymous username, not my real name 19:36, 27 December 2022 (UTC)Reply

Passing

That was fast! Everything seems fine now, excepting the sources to be removed, which I'll leave you to do in your own time. Passing now, thanks for producing a highly informative article. Amitchell125 (talk) 20:54, 27 December 2022 (UTC)Reply

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