Talk:Lonely Among Us/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Glimmer721 (talk · contribs) 17:46, 3 June 2013 (UTC) I will review sometime this week. Glimmer721 ^talk 17:46, 3 June 2013 (UTC)

Comments

• "originally aired on November 2, 1987" - either "originally airing" or "that originally aired" (without the comma before it)

• Changed to "that" without the comma. Miyagawa (talk) 17:21, 5 June 2013 (UTC)

• Perhaps say, "as well as the second appearance of Colm Meaney, who would later play The Next Generation and Deep Space Nine character Miles O'Brien." Adds the significance.

• Done. Miyagawa (talk) 17:21, 5 June 2013 (UTC)

• Perhaps add more to the lead about the writing of the particular episode.

• Added - particularly the mention of "Journey to Babel". Miyagawa (talk) 17:21, 5 June 2013 (UTC)

• Are there really only 3 other actors aside from the regulars? Just checking.

• There were only three guest stars credited - I think the majority of the alien actors were probably stunt actors. Miyagawa (talk) 17:21, 5 June 2013 (UTC)

• "...sedates Worf and brings him to sickbay..." Is it just "sickbay" or "the sickbay"? I can't remember which was used more commonly.

• I changed it to the sickbay, its better grammatically at least. :) Miyagawa (talk) 17:21, 5 June 2013 (UTC)

• "This episode was subsequently compared to "Journey to Babel" → "Lonely Among Us" was subsequently compared to "Journey to Babel...". Just to avoid confusion.

• Changed as suggested.

• "who had previously worked on shows such as V and The Six Million Dollar Man." Italicize the titles of the TV shows.

• Fixed. Miyagawa (talk) 17:21, 5 June 2013 (UTC)

• I'm not sure "rewatched" needs the hyphen.

• Fixed. Not sure how that one snuck in. Miyagawa (talk) 17:21, 5 June 2013 (UTC)

• I also made a few small grammatical changes elswhere.
• This seems like a fansite. I'm not sure the sentence it sources is very relevant anyway; it seems like trivia. Ditto with ref #5.

• I've removed those sections. Miyagawa (talk) 17:25, 5 June 2013 (UTC)

• I notice that in this article you've combined the home media releases to the reception section, which is different from the other season 1 articles you've done. I like this article's format better, but if you're aiming for a Good Topic in the future than you'll want to get them with all the same, whether the changes be made here or to the other articles.

• Yeah, this was the format I'd been using for Enterprise and the Deep Space Nine ones - I thought it looked neater rather than the ones with a single line or two for a section. Once I get all the season 1 articles up to scratch I'll need to go back through the earlier ones and upgrade them to current formatting. I know I've used a couple of different formats for the reference sections, and I found the viewing figures only about half way through, so I need to go back through and add those to the other articles. Miyagawa (talk) 17:25, 5 June 2013 (UTC)

I'm putting this on hold for 7 days while the above (minor) issues are addressed. Overall the article is good. I think I may have seen this episode, actually...the "dress uniforms" rings a bell! Weren't they basically wearing skirts? Glimmer721 ^talk 01:04, 5 June 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for the review - yeah, they never could get those dress uniforms to look right. They admittedly weren't as bad as the miniskirts that they had some of the male crewmembers wear, although I think really only the dress uniforms introduced in Insurrection were OK. The rest were horrid. Miyagawa (talk) 17:21, 5 June 2013 (UTC)

All right, I will pass now. Glimmer721 ^talk 20:45, 5 June 2013 (UTC)