Talk:Lost in the World/GA2

Latest comment: 12 years ago by 1111tomica in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: 1111tomica (talk · contribs) I will review the article. :) 13:23, 11 January 2012 (UTC)Reply

There aren't any disambiguation links or broken references. That's good. — Tomica1111Question Existing? 14:02, 11 January 2012 (UTC)Reply
Lead
  • First of all, remove all the references from the lead and place them in the article body. — Tomica1111Question Existing? 14:02, 11 January 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • "Lost in the World" is a song by American hip hop recording artist Kanye West from his studio album, My Beautiful Dark Twisted Fantasy ---> "Lost in the World" is a song by American hip hop recording artist Kanye West from his fifth studio album, My Beautiful Dark Twisted Fantasy (2010). — Tomica1111Question Existing? 14:02, 11 January 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • The song was initially released on September 29 and was shorter, but the version on the album was shortened with its ending becoming a new track, "Who Will Survive in America". ---> Very bad wording, I can't even understand the sentence. — Tomica1111Question Existing? 14:02, 11 January 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • The track received positive reviews from critics and was considered one of the strongest tracks of My Beautiful Dark Twisted Fantasy. ---> The song received positive reviews from music critics, which considered it as one of the strongest compositions on My Beautiful Dark Twisted Fantasy.Tomica1111Question Existing? 14:02, 11 January 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • The song was prominently featured during the closing credits of Runaway, a 35 minute music video directed by West set to music from My Beautiful Dark Twisted Fantasy. ---> "Lost in the World" was featured during the closing credits of "Runaway", a 35 minute music video directed by West set with music from the album. — Tomica1111Question Existing? 14:02, 11 January 2012 (UTC)Reply
Background
Composition
Reception ---> Critical reception
Live performances
References

To be honest, they look pretty awful, nearly all the references miss their own publisher. I will elaborate it in the next steps. — Tomica1111Question Existing? 21:46, 12 January 2012 (UTC)Reply

  • 2. Publisher for Rap-Up is Devine Lazerine.
  • 3. Publisher for Allmusic is Rovi Corporation.
  • 6. publisher= MTV News. Viacom.
  • 8. Publisher for Exclaim! should be Ian Danzig
  • 9. Same as 6
  • 11. Publisher= Jann Wenner
  • 12. Should be {{cite web}}, not {{cite news}}
  • 13. Publisher for Idolator is Buzz Media
  • 14. Same as 6 and 9
  • 15. Same as 6, 9 and 14
  • 16. Unlink Pitchfork Media
  • 17. Same as 6, 9, 14 and 15
  • 18. Allmusic should be un-italicized and same as 3
  • 22. Same as 11
  • 24. Publisher = IPC Media (Time Inc.)
  • 25. Publisher= The New York Times
  • 26. Publisher= Tribune Company
  • 27. Publisher=Village Voice Media
  • 28. Publisher= Jann Wenner
  • 30. Same as 6, 9, 14, 15 and 17
  • 31. Knightnews?! Mmm Is it a reliable source?
  • 32. Publisher= The Washington Post Company
  • 33. Un-link Slant Magazine
  • 35. Same as 2
  • 36. Same as 11 and 22
  • 37. Same as 2 and 35
  • 38. Same as 6, 9, 14, 15, 17 and 30
  • 39. Un-link Idolator
  • Now I also noted that for some references is not used {{cite web}} or {{cite news}}, please add to all of them ! Also ... Sometimes the work should be in italics (magazines, newspapers), but sometimes NOT (websites)! For that you should respectively choose where you should write your work/publisher. (For example work=Rolling Stones (its a magazine, it should be in italics)|publisher=Jann Wenner/ or/ publisher=MTV News. Viacom (cause its a website and italics is not needed). — Tomica1111Question Existing? 20:02, 13 January 2012 (UTC)Reply
All in all
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
When I first looked on the article, I thought it was in good condition and will be easy with it. But on a second view, it really need a lot of work. I will put it on hold for 7 days, since its a small article and I really think you can handle all the issues in that period. Good luck — Tomica1111Question Existing? 21:46, 12 January 2012 (UTC)Reply


I believe I have addressed these issues, if not instruct me further. Bruce Campbell (talk) 19:55, 13 January 2012 (UTC)Reply