Talk:Louis-René Villermé

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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Faithkbrown. Peer reviewers: Aeisenstadt1.

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Adding a complete biography of Villermé

Currently, there are only three sentences that make up Villermé's biography. I would like to expand on this information as well as the information regarding his works (specifically On Prisons As They Are and As They Should Be). As of now, I have about 3 sound sources to help compile a more complete biography. Any suggestions for sources, topics to make sure to cover, or general information that should be included would be of extreme help as this talk page does not yet have very many, if any, current discussions. --Faithkbrown (talk) 19:15, 19 February 2017 (UTC)

Faithkbrown (talk) 18:05, 10 March 2017 (UTC)

Comment

This is great! I love the in depth approach to Villermé's life! My one suggestion is to maybe double check that your sentences don't lead to conclusions about Villermé or his character. There seem to be some statements like "He is unique", etc. Anyway, this is really cool to read and you cover a nice chunk of information in a concise way!Aeisenstadt1 (talk) 22:25, 15 March 2017 (UTC)

Thank you for the positive feedback! I will review the sections that I wrote to double check any possible implications I may have made. Faithkbrown (talk) 22:19, 29 March 2017 (UTC)

>> Tableau de l'état physique et moral des ouvriers employés dans les manufactures de coton, de laine et de soie >> Why is it necessary to write 2 different paragraphs on the same subject (Tableau / Study) ?

Potential Edits

I really enjoyed reading your article. You contributed quite substantially and your organization is clear and concise. I believe that adding more about Villerme's political affiliations and how this impacted his views on public health would be very effective in that it would allow the reader to understand his background a bit better. You covered it slightly at the end, although it would be great to expand on it. Perhaps you can draw on what we discussed in lecture?

Thanks!

Scarycheerio123 (talk) 03:05, 27 March 2017 (UTC)Scarycheerio123

Thank you for the feedback. I have been looking into his political affiliations and have found it rather difficult to find information in English. If I do find out anymore, however, I will be sure to add. Faithkbrown (talk) 22:20, 29 March 2017 (UTC)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Louis-René Villermé/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 06:15, 14 June 2017 (UTC)

I propose to take on this review. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:15, 14 June 2017 (UTC)

First reading

This article is in general well written, well referenced and reasonably comprehensive. It meets most of the GA criteria and I have listed a few points below. It seems to be part of a student project and the nominator has not edited since 2 May and may have moved on to other things. It should be possible to bring this article to GA standard even if the nominator is unresponsive.

• The lead is rather short. It should not be necessary to have citations in the lead because the lead should be summarising content in the main body of text (where they should be cited), and should not include any facts not mentioned elsewhere.
• "This work served not only as valuable information to medical institutions and boards, but also as a widely received social statement by the public." - This sentence is difficult to understand, could you rephrase it.
  • That's all for now. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 08:58, 14 June 2017 (UTC)

• There has been no response to my brief review, so I have done some editing to the article with regard to the points I made, and I believe it now meets the GA criteria so I am passing it. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:34, 9 July 2017 (UTC)