Talk:Louse/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 (talk · contribs) 20:46, 22 November 2015 (UTC)

Comment by Dunkleosteus77

• Is this written in British English? If so, place the template {{British English}} to the article's talk page  Done

Yes, it seems that was how it was started. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:02, 23 November 2015 (UTC)

• Put the Classification section at the top, before the Description section  Done
• Try merging the Examples section with the Classification section  Done
• Put the two sections on humans under one section (called Interaction with humans, Humans and lice...) and change the title of Lice and humans to Prehistory, and change Lice in humans society to Modern history  Done
• Merge the In history section with the Interaction with humans section (since they both regard humans)

Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:50, 25 November 2015 (UTC)

General comments

• In the lead, change "nearly 5,000 species of insect" to "...insects"

If this is British then "...insect" is correct.

• In the lead, change "...which include every order of birds, and all the orders of mammals except for..." to "which includes every species of bird and mammal, except for...  Done
• In the lead, change "Lice are the vectors of diseases..." to "Lice are vectors of diseases..."  Done
• In the lead, change "pierce their host's skin" to "pierce the host's skin" (this is optional)  Done
• In the lead, change "has the smallest genome known for an insect" to "...smallest genome of any known insect"  Done
• In the lead, change "cementing their eggs to hairs or feathers where they are known as 'nits'" to "cementing their eggs, which are known as nits, to hairs or feathers"  Done
• In the lead, change "They appear in folktales, songs such as The Kilkenny Louse House, and novels such as Finnegans Wake" to "...song, such as... and novels, such as..." (optional)

Not sure that's an improvement.

• In the Description section, change "are retractable into their heads" to "are retractable into their head"; also, do they have multiple mouth parts?  Done

All insects have multiple mouth parts. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:07, 23 November 2015 (UTC)

• In the Description section, wikilink "Ischnocera" and "Amblycera"  Done
• In the Biology section, change "Lice are divided into two groups, sucking lice..." to "Lice are divided into two groups: sucking lice..."  Done
• In the Biology section, change "...and chewing lice, scavengers..." to "...and chewing lice, which are scavengers...  Done
• In the Biology section, change "...within a month of hatching" to "...within a month after hatching"  Done
• In the Ecology section, change "...that dive under the water surface..." to "...that dive under the water..."  Done
• In the Taxonomy section, do not wikilink "sucking"  Done
• In the Taxonomy section, wikilink "Austrogonoides" and "Nesiotinus"  Done
• In the Lice and humans section, wikilink "chimpanzee-hominid divergence" (optional); the article I'm referring to is called "Chimpanzee–human last common ancestor"  Done
• In the In literature and folklore section, why is " 'very popular' " in quotes?

Removed. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:50, 25 November 2015 (UTC)

References

• Add access dates to all refs

I don't think these are needed when the source is a book or journal article. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:50, 25 November 2015 (UTC)

• ref no. 9 specifies page number as "pp. 83–". Please finish

Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:50, 25 November 2015 (UTC)

• ref no. 21 specifies journal title as being "Parasitol"; change to "Parasitology"

Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:50, 25 November 2015 (UTC)

• ref no. 29, italicize "Pediculus humanus" in the title

Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:50, 25 November 2015 (UTC)

• ref no. 29, 30, and 31 currently do not use the template {{cite journal}} (and they should).

Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:50, 25 November 2015 (UTC)

• ref no. 41 specifies page number as "180.18-28"; I'm confused what this is supposed to mean

Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:50, 25 November 2015 (UTC)

It passes

• Thank you Dunkleosteus77. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:00, 25 November 2015 (UTC)