Talk:Love Lies Bleeding (ballet)

Performance Section

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Hi there! Could anyone help me find more tour/performance dates for the show? There seem to be scattered articles about performances, but no cohesive list of all of them. Thanks! - TM21NU (talk) 19:48, 20 October 2020 (UTC)

TM21NU, Wikipedians aren't likely to see this unless you "tag" them with their usernames. They will be notified if you leave a message for them on their talk page. You can also leave a message on the Talk page of a related project. -Reagle (talk) 17:27, 29 October 2020 (UTC)

Reagle, I did add a section on the Wikiproject:Dance talk page so people can see that I asked for help. I can leave more messages on talk pages if needed. Maybe I can ask for help on the talk page for the Alberta Ballet Company? - TM21NU (talk) 18:10, 29 October 2020 (UTC)

Okay. Doesn't look like there's much happening on the latter talk page though. You might see if there were big contributors to related pages and drop them a message on their Talk pages asking for feedback. -Reagle (talk) 19:17, 29 October 2020 (UTC)

Review

Excellent start! I made a few edits. Please proceed according to the directions in the syllabus. -Reagle (talk) 12:56, 19 October 2020 (UTC)

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Hi TM21NU! I think the article is great. I didn't see any redundancy and overall I think the article is great. It has a lot of great quotes of reviews and a good background section that clearly lists the history of the ballet. I thought some of the wording could sound a little promotional (though not one-sided) but I was hesitant to make any major changes. I think structure-wise, it could be a good idea to move all the section with words to the top--I almost missed the bottom two sections after the graph listing because I assumed the listing would be where the article would end.

But all the information was very clear and easy to read. It was really detailed and overall, I really enjoyed learning about this topic! I am not a huge expert on ballets and theater so this was really interesting! Crohbar (talk) 08:43, 10 November 2020 (UTC)

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Hi TM21NU, I too found this to be a really great article, the information you presented was concise, direct, and had a nice flow to it. The sections all make sense in how they're ordered, with no noticeable redundancies. I really appreciated the background section, as I felt having that context helped when reading about the actual story of the play.

I also agree with Crohbar that it could sound a little promotional at times, but I think that's mostly just because you're quoting reviews, which seems to be fine. I think it's great that you attempted to balance that by adding critical reviews, if there are any other noteworthy reviews that are more critical in nature that could be helpful, but considering the play was so well received I understand that those might not really exist at all.

Overall I thought this was great, nicely detailed and worded, was really enjoyable to read about. Mambonumber7 (talk) 14:39, 10 November 2020 (UTC)

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Hi TM21NU! I love the article! It was so informative and low key made me wanna watch this (I've never watched ballet live before and I never knew of the existence of jukebox ballet so now I'm hooked!). It is very extensive and included a lot of good information.

I had two main notes. The first was with regards to the story section: Were you aiming for a summary of the ballet or more of a gloss over? At some points, you're detailed with scenes but I'm not getting a beginning, middle, and end to the play.

Second, I know that images of the ballet itself would be difficult to get and/or upload (I also attempted to look for youtube videos that are licensed for use but didn't get anything), but have you thought of adding images of the creators instead? There are images available for Elton John, Bernie Taupin, and Joni Mitchell (for instance) that could help spice up the page a bit more.

Overall, this is a very strong article with a lot of good sources. I do see the notes the others have made regarding it being too promotional, but I think you balance that by also adding in the negative reviews or comments about the ballet. PErhaps this is something you'd like to play around with as well— should there be a section break for positive and negative reviews, or should it be as is?

Great work! 8isfate (talk) 17:06, 10 November 2020 (UTC)

FanPOV?

MrsSnoozyTurtle, I removed your Fanpov and Cleanup-PR templates because I'm not sure what prompted them. If you can be specific, I'm sure the article can be improved. -Reagle (talk) 20:39, 9 December 2020 (UTC)

• Hi Reagle. The concerns I have are that it includes minor details of fan interest, such as "Grand-Maître later emailed John's staff to see if John was interested in collaborating to create a ballet, to which John responded five minutes". And the overall tone is like a glowing press release, rather than an impartial encyclopedia article. Regards, MrsSnoozyTurtle (talk) 21:20, 9 December 2020 (UTC)

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 7 September 2020 and 14 December 2020. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): TM21NU.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 17:32, 18 January 2022 (UTC)