Talk:Lovely (Billie Eilish and Khalid song)/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: HĐ (talk · contribs) 07:14, 18 August 2020 (UTC)

Overall the article is in good shape. Will start the review shortly. HĐ (talk) 07:14, 18 August 2020 (UTC)

Lead

• It was certified tuplet platinum in Australia → "5× Platinum" is better; and why is Australia singled out here, given that the song was certified multi-platinum in several countries?
• "The video depicts Eilish and Khalid walking around a glass case, interacting with each other" → anything more specific?

Background

• "of her debut EP" → whose EP?
• "production was solely handled by the latter" → "latter" is usually used for two subjects, not three or more

Composition

• "Eilish also explained about working" → why is there the word "also"?
• I'm not sure if "crooning miserably" is encyclopedic; try somethine else like "singing in a melancholic tone"
• Ditto for "inextricably trapped"
• "gets even worse" → ditto; can be reworded to something like "gets more dramatic"

Critical reception

• "received critical acclaim from music critics" → "critical acclaim" already implie "music critics"
• Too many quotes (WP:QUOTEFARM). Try paraphrase the bulk of the section

Commercial performance

• "first debuted" → "debuted" already implies "first"
• "It was the most successful in Australia" → Is it the most successful single in Australia?
• "It has also received the highest certification in Australia" → the highest certification in Australia is not 5× Platinum

Music video

• "The visual begins Eilish being trapped inside a crystalline box" → grammar

Overall

• Tables and references are properly formatted.

Should my concerns be addressed, I will pass the GAN. Good job overall, HĐ (talk) 07:29, 18 August 2020 (UTC)

HĐ, Thanks for the review. I have addressed all of your concerns. Lmk if anything else needs to be fixed. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 18:07, 18 August 2020 (UTC)

Why Australia is singled out in the lede has not been addressed. Furthermore, phrases like "acclaim" / "positive reviews" are a case of WP:SYNTH and given undue weight. Please consider removing such phrases, HĐ (talk) 01:41, 19 August 2020 (UTC)

HĐ, Sorry, I forgot to look at the lead... All of the issues should be fixed. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 02:30, 19 August 2020 (UTC)

Thanks for addressing my concerns. This article looks good to be GA now. Well done, HĐ (talk) 03:15, 19 August 2020 (UTC)