Talk:Ludlow Castle

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It Is a great place with wonderful scenery.It has fantastic views that strectch pasted Ludlow itself. GO AND VISIT IT NOW!!!

Aside from not understanding what "strectch pasted" is meant to mean, this isn't the place for a tourism advert. The last two paragraphs of the article need serious work. The next to last para is weak and begs embellishment, the last para requires legitimate references for its claims and the final sentence is meaningless. I'm commenting these out. Can someone please fix these? Canonblack 16:58, 25 January 2006 (UTC)Reply

Proposed change to citation style...

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I'm looking to do some further work to expand this article over the coming months. Before starting though, I'd like to propose a change to the citation style. The current style uses long references, e.g. "Coplestone-Crow "The End of the Anarchy to the de Genevilles" Ludlow Castle pp. 35–36". I wish to propose using the harnvb template short citation system throughout, backed up by the "cite web" template as appropriate; the previous example would appear as "Coplestone-Crow 2000, pp. 35-36" under this approach, for example, linked to the relevant item in the bibliography. I personally think that short citations for articles with lots of citations, particularly from edited volumes, are easier to read and to edit. Such a change requires prior consensus on this talk page, as per MOS:CITE, of course (Nev, just to alert you in particular, as your considerable expansion of the article in 2012 established the current style!).

NB: if the consensus was to stay with the current style, I would look to carry out the expansion work anyway, using the current citation style. Hchc2009 (talk) 06:08, 18 October 2014 (UTC)Reply

It was only ever half finished anyway! The current system isn't my usual style; my own preference would be for the shorter references, but that's partly because it's always been the style I've defaulted to. It was formatted to fit into the broad arc of Ealdgyth's articles, such as Josce de Dinan. I have absolutely no objection to changing the citation style or sticking with the current one, but I've pinged Ealdgyth in this comment so she knows about the change. Nev1 (talk) 12:14, 18 October 2014 (UTC)Reply
Not a problem for me - I actually didn't have this article watchlisted. Ealdgyth - Talk 12:35, 18 October 2014 (UTC)Reply
Clearly a go on this, and thanks for asking. Johnbod (talk) 14:17, 18 October 2014 (UTC)Reply
Done. I've now got some of the older articles as well, so will make a start on the expansion next. Hchc2009 (talk) 08:00, 1 November 2014 (UTC)Reply

Expansion...

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...I've gone through and expanded the article a bit, and added maps etc. It will need a decent copyedit etc. I suspect. Hchc2009 (talk) 11:20, 5 December 2014 (UTC)Reply

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 00:50, 7 December 2014 (UTC)Reply


I'll take this one. Review to follow, it will probably take a few days given the length of the article. Cheers. Zawed (talk) 00:50, 7 December 2014 (UTC)Reply

Lead

  • Haven't picked up any issues at this stage.

11th century

  • The second sentence of the 2nd paragraph: repetition of Walter. I suggest replacing the second occurrence with "his".

12th century

  • "...probably either around the siege of 1139...": I think it would read better if "around" was replaced with "at the time of"

13th century

  • "Walter de Lacy returned to Ireland...": Walter's first visit to Ireland hasn't been mentioned so you may want to replace "returned".
  • link Peter de Geneva and since it is the first mention of him, Prince Edward. I think you have linked him later.

Other stuff

Still have to do from 15th century onwards. Zawed (talk) 08:08, 8 December 2014 (UTC)Reply

NB: all done. I went for "around the time of the siege" in the end, as "at the time of" might make it sound too precise. I couldn't find an existing article for Peter de Geneva, but may be missing an obvious one! Hchc2009 (talk) 18:23, 13 December 2014 (UTC)Reply

Continuing review:

15th century

  • link King Henry IV
  • "Henry kept the young heir to Ludlow, Edmund Mortimer, under house arrest..."; may want to say "another Edmund" to avoid confusion with (presumably) his father. Also "kept" is used twice in this sentence, suggest the first usage be changed to "placed"?
  • typos here: "much of the in the 1450s."
  • First sentence of 5th para a bit long and covers off different subject matter; suggest splitting at the first comma.
  • The ref for the tile image (54) may be better expressed as a note?

16th century

  • link Henry VIII
  • "Sir Henry extended...": this sentence could be started with "He", since Henry already introduced in previous sentence.
  • What is "Mortimer's Tower"? Is it the Guardrobe Tower built in the 14th century (1st para of that section)?

17th century

  • Doing a quick ce on the first sentence of this section, I noticed what looks like text, but no wiki markup, for a note at the end of the first para.
  • "...being sent to Hereford...": should "being" be "and were"?

18th century

  • "is in the very Pefection of Decay": may want to add a [sic] if this is an accurate quote.
  • "Nonetheless, although some rooms remained usable for many years afterwards, possibly as late as the 1760s and 1770s, when drawings show the entrance block to the inner bailey to still be intact, and visitors remarked on the good condition of the round chapel.": Some grammatical issues in this sentence, perhaps "although" should be deleted?
  • "...public walks around the castle, dug into the cliffs around the castle...": repetition here, suggest "...dug into the surrounding cliffs..."
  • laid what with gravel?

19th century

  • "...outright for £1,560", "was worth £50 a year", "admission costing six pence": perhaps notes to cover the conversions?

20th century

  • The first half of the 3rd para feels like it needs to be earlier in this section for smoother chronology.
  • I struggled with this one originally. I couldn't find a way of getting the first part up in the section without then leaving a very thin paragraph hanging there in that position later on, which also looked odd. Hchc2009 (talk) 09:04, 23 December 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • "who rented out the flats.": which rented.

Inner bailey

  • "Within the inner bailey, a separate area, called the innermost bailey,...": is this the "inmost bailey" of the "Architecture" section?

References

  • All references have corresponding entries in the bibliographic section where appropriate.

OK, all done here. Will check back in a few days for your responses. Cheers. Zawed (talk) 03:33, 14 December 2014 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the really useful review. All the changes should have been done now, or responses left above. Hchc2009 (talk) 09:18, 23 December 2014 (UTC)Reply
Your changes and comments look good to me, Hchc2009. Passing as GA. As always, awesome work! Zawed (talk) 01:14, 29 December 2014 (UTC)Reply
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