Talk:Luna (Feid and ATL Jacob song)/GA1
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GA Review
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Nominator: Pollosito (talk · contribs) 22:12, 12 March 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:24, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a. (reference section):
- b. (citations to reliable sources):
- c. (OR):
- d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a. (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a. (major aspects):
- b. (focused):
- a. (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
- b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/fail:
- Pass/fail:
(Criteria marked are unassessed)
I will crack on with this one right away! --K. Peake 07:24, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
edit- WP:OVERLINK of Fred under songwriters and ATL Jacob under producers
- Done One thing, "Fred" => "Feid" LOL. Santi (talk) 17:26, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- "on December 1, 2023 through" → "on December 1, 2023, through" plus this should be the sentence directly before the composition instead
- Done Santi (talk) 17:26, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- "but later sent the track to" → "until later being sent to"
- Done Santi (talk) 17:26, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- "It is the second song on which Villada collaborates with an American hip hop producer after "Le Pido a Dios" with DJ Premier, so it was" → "The second song on which Villada collaborates with an American hip hop producer after "Le Pido a Dios" with DJ Premier, it was" and make this the sentence directly after the writers/producers
- Done Santi (talk) 17:26, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- I think it is worth noting how many countries it further reached the top 10 in and the certifications, in a separate sentence
- Done Tell me if you liked the result. Santi (talk) 17:26, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- "An accompanying music video, directed by Sebastián Sánchez and released on March 6, 2024" → "An accompanying music video, directed by Sebastián Sánchez and released on March 6, 2024," with the wikilink
- Done Santi (talk) 17:26, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- I think the synopsis summary here can be cut off after him going back in time
- Done Santi (talk) 17:26, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
Background and critical reception
edit- Are you sure this shouldn't be titled Background and composition?
- Not done Yes, 69,886% sure. The way in which the information about the composition and the observation of the Argentine Billboard staff is presented could prevent it from being called "composition" instead of "critical reception". Santi (talk) 17:35, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- The opening sentence reads weirdly and should say in the order that he released his first EP Sixdo as a surprise release through Universal Music Latino
- Not done I don't understand your pov. If you mean mentioning the album first and then the EP, I don't think that's a good idea. It is this way because the EP has a collaboration with a hip hop producer, a characteristic that this song also shares, so the background starts from there. Further back, that is, Feliz Cumpleaños Ferxxo..., has no direct or indirect connection with the song. Santi (talk) 17:35, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Remove overly obvious wikilink on studio album
- Done Santi (talk) 17:35, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- "he announced on" → "Villada announced on"
- Done Santi (talk) 17:35, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- "surprise release and sharing that" → "surprise release and sharing,"
- Done Santi (talk) 17:35, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Audio sample looks good!
- Comment: Thank u. Santi (talk) 17:35, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- "through the window."" → "through the window"." per MOS:QUOTE
- Done Santi (talk) 17:35, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- "It was" → "The song was"
- Done Santi (talk) 17:35, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Remove wikilink on Italy
- Done Santi (talk) 17:35, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- "go with another person."" → "go with another person"."
- Done Santi (talk) 17:35, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- "to the global level."" → "to the global level"." and add "The staff of" before the publication
- Done Santi (talk) 17:35, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
Commercial performance
edit- Img looks good!
- Comment: Thank u. Santi (talk) 17:47, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Swap this with music video for the correct order
- Done Santi (talk) 17:47, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- "received a 3x Platinum" → "received a triple platinum" and mention how many units signified by this in the country
- Done As I saw in other recent GAs, it is not necessary, but it's fine. Santi (talk) 17:47, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- "despite a decrease of 8%" → "despite a decrease of 6%" per the source
- Done Santi (talk) 17:47, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Write quadruple platinum instead and mention this was in the US
- Not done I think the fact that such information appears in a paragraph focused exclusively on commercial perf in the US gives that enough sense. Santi (talk) 17:47, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- "outside the United States compared" → "outside the US compared" per MOS:US
- Done Santi (talk) 17:47, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- "the song climbed three spots to" → "the song had climbed to" since this is two weeks, not one
- Done Santi (talk) 17:47, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Mention both the artists it was the first top five for
- Done Santi (talk) 17:47, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
Music video
edit- Merge with the below section and retitle to Music video and promotion
- Partly done: Renamed to "promotion" and subsections added. Santi (talk) 17:53, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- "this song so far, we made" → "this song so far. We made" per the source
- Done Santi (talk) 17:53, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- InfoBae should not be italicized
- Done Santi (talk) 17:53, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- "resonance among viewers."" → "resonance among viewers"." per MOS:QUOTE
- Done Santi (talk) 17:53, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- "shoot her partner starring Villada" what does this mean?
- Done Sorry for strange expresions, I hope it's better now. Santi (talk) 17:53, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
Live performances and covers
edit- Make this the second para of the above section
- Partly done per above. Santi (talk) 18:16, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
- Done Santi (talk) 18:16, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Pipe Lollapalooza Argentina to Lollapalooza
- Done Santi (talk) 18:16, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
Accolades
edit- Per the Best Urban Song being written out in the lead, you need to add a mention of it in prose here – I would suggest a para summarizing these awards
- Not done What do you refer? This or replace the table to a para? Santi (talk) 17:57, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Pollosito Upon further assessment, I would suggest to replace with prose since this is not many awards and also, you missed changing 4x Platinum to quadruple platinum. --K. Peake 20:21, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake: Aaa ok. And sorry for the 4x platinum. Santi (talk) 20:28, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake: Now Done. Would you tell me about the result? Santi (talk) 20:54, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake: Aaa ok. And sorry for the 4x platinum. Santi (talk) 20:28, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Pollosito Upon further assessment, I would suggest to replace with prose since this is not many awards and also, you missed changing 4x Platinum to quadruple platinum. --K. Peake 20:21, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Not done What do you refer? This or replace the table to a para? Santi (talk) 17:57, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Refs should be centered
- Done Oops. Santi (talk) 17:57, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
Credits and personnel
edit- Use
{{spaced ndash}}
so there is the right space between credits and personnel- Done Santi (talk) 18:00, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
Charts
editWeekly charts
edit- Pipe FONOTICA to Asociación Costarricense de la Industria Fonográfica y Afines
- Done Santi (talk) 18:03, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
Monthly charts
edit- Good
Certifications
edit- Good
Release history
edit- Good
References
edit- Copyvio score looks great at 27.0%!!!
- Comment: Thank u. Santi (talk) 18:14, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Regarding MOS:CAPS issues, only remove capitalization on any refs where it is not part of the stylization of the artist or musical work name
- Done Tell me more if you want. Santi (talk) 18:14, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Cite Los 40 as publisher instead on refs 1 and 44
- Done Santi (talk) 18:14, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Add Rolling Stone on ref 3 with the wikilink
- Done Oops. Santi (talk) 18:14, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Pipe Vogue México to Vogue México y Latinoamérica on ref 4
- Done Santi (talk) 18:14, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Cite Radio Programas del Perú as publisher instead on ref 5
- Done Santi (talk) 18:14, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Wikilink El Colombiano on ref 8
- Done Santi (talk) 18:14, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Pipe Universal Music Latino to Universal Music Latin Entertainment on ref 12
- Done Santi (talk) 18:14, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Pipe Rolling Stone en Español to Rolling Stone on ref 13
- Done Santi (talk) 18:14, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Pipe FONOTICA to Asociación Costarricense de la Industria Fonográfica y Afines on ref 18
- Done Santi (talk) 18:14, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Cite Infobae as publisher instead on refs 37 and 40
- Done Santi (talk) 18:14, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Wikilink YouTube on ref 39
- Done Santi (talk) 18:14, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Cite AStv Colombia as publisher instead on ref 41
- Done Santi (talk) 18:14, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
Final comments and verdict
edit- On hold until all of the issues are fixed; I'll be able to get back on it even if you are done later today! --K. Peake 08:44, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake, one more thing, I hope not bother. Before pass or fail, I would like to ask if there is one interesting piece of information in this article that I can give for DYK, because from my perspective, I'm not sure or there really isn't any. It's to avoid screwing up just in case. Santi (talk) 21:13, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Pollosito ✓ Pass has come and in regards to DYK, I'd suggest the description of taking hip hop to god level. --K. Peake 21:53, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake: Thank you so much for this review. Santi (talk) 22:13, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
- Pollosito ✓ Pass has come and in regards to DYK, I'd suggest the description of taking hip hop to god level. --K. Peake 21:53, 10 June 2024 (UTC)