Talk:Luochahai City/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Bremps (talk · contribs) 21:39, 21 May 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 11:05, 29 September 2024 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

   b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a. (reference section):

   b. (citations to reliable sources):

   c. (OR):

   d. (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a. (major aspects):

   b. (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

   b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

You have been waiting too long for this, so I will review now of course! --K. Peake 11:05, 29 September 2024 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• The infobox release date may be of the song on the album, but this still needs to be sourced in the body
• Remove jazz and rhythm and blues from the genres since these are only sourced as elements
• Remove full-stop at the end of the length
• Audio sample should be in the body instead with info added to the text
• The lead is too short; information needs to be added about the composition, more on lyrics and reception too
• "The song is inspired by" → "The song was inspired by" and shouldn't the name of the story be surrounded by speech marks?
• "Described as Dao's "comeback anthem"," should be re-worded as something to make it more clear that this was after he produced little for a decade
• "it was streamed over 10 billion times within two months of its release," → "it was viewed over 10 billion times within two months of release," per the body
• "and attracted widespread speculation as to the meaning of its "cryptic" and "absurd"" → "The song attracted speculation as to the meaning of its satirical" to summarize better, starting a new sentence and add a bit more about the lyrical content of the song too

Background

• "(as of January 2005)," → "by January 2005,"
• [3][1][4][5] should be in numerical order
• [3][1][6] should be in numerical order
• Change "in 2023" to mentioning the exact date of the album instead so the release date in the infobox is sourced

Composition

Inspiration

• Move img to the left
• The story named in the infobox should be mentioned in prose here for it to properly sourced

Lyrics, interpretation and instrumentation

• [3] should only be invoked at the end of the first sentence not after cryptic too, as the end is literally next from this
• Ditto for the Ludwig Wittgenstein sentence especially since there is another ref backing this up
• Pipe compound ideograph to Compound ideographs itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
• Img looks good!
• "Chinese music industry, including Na Ying," → "Chinese music industry, including Ying,"
• "believed that this song" → "believed that the song" but this quote does not appear to be sourced
• "readings draw parallels" → "readings drew parallels"
• "that dominates throughout."" → "that dominates throughout"." per MOS:QUOTE

Reception and charts

• Retitle to Reception since chart performance counts as a form of this
• Mention the names of any reviewers who are identified from the sources
• "volcanic anti-establishment mentality."" → "volcanic anti-establishment mentality"." per MOS:QUOTE
• "Singer Wang Feng, who is possibly" → "Feng, who is possibly" since his full name was already used in the previous section

Commercial performance

• "and as of December 29, 2023," → "and up to December 29, 2023,"

Notes

• [3] does not need to be invoked since it is already at the end of the same sentence as the note in prose

References

• Copyvio cannot be checked, but looks like an absence of quotes mostly
• Cite What's on Weido as website on ref 1
• Wikilink South China Morning Post on ref 2
• Cite BBC News as publisher with the wikilink on ref 4
• Wikilink The Economist on ref 5
• Cite Hudson Institute as the publisher with wikilink on ref 9
• Cite DW as publisher and pipe to Deutsche Welle on ref 10
• Wikilink The Japan News on ref 11
• Wikilink United Daily News on ref 12
• Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine) on ref 13

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed; this was fast after your long wait! --K. Peake 16:16, 29 September 2024 (UTC)

  Hello @Kyle Peake, thank you very much for reviewing my article. I will most likely address the issues during WikiConference North America (which starts on the 4th). I hope that the timeframe is fine by you. Cheers, Bremps... 20:05, 30 September 2024 (UTC)

  Bremps Yeah no problem at all, the usual time frame for hold is 7 days so that's well within it anyway! --K. Peake 20:18, 30 September 2024 (UTC)