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editThe article needed copyediting, which I did. I tried to maintain the meaning of the original article. However, I had a few questions:
"After the turn it was active as a teacher in Bad Sachsa" -- I don't understand what this means. Can someone please express this correctly on the page?
"1998 he took the life himself" -- it sounds like the author is stating that Hoffmann committed suicide. However, there's no source cited, and I could not find any reference to Hoffmann's death in an internet search. Suicide is a claim that I'm not comfortable making without evidence or personal knowledge. If someone can either (a) verify the suicide claim and insert a sentence to that effect, or (b) explain how I'm misinterpreting that sentence, I'd be grateful.
Finally, I'd appreciate a check to be sure that I interpreted the original correctly.
Moishe Rosenbaum 20:07, 5 August 2007 (UTC)
- "After the turn it was active as a teacher in Bad Sachsa" - Bad Sachsa is a town in Germany.
- "1998 he took the life himself." - I'm comfortable enough that this means he committed suicide in 1998, so I'm entering it into the article, with a "citation needed" tag.
- There's no cites for his birth and death dates and places, either, but if he died in Bad Sachsa in 1998, he likely had a job there, apparently as a "teacher". While a bit vague, I think the facts (as presented) are simple enough to reiterate in plain English. -- Yamara 01:18, 28 December 2007 (UTC)