Talk:Macdonald seamount

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Macdonald seamount/GA2. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 13:54, 28 May 2019 (UTC)

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I will use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:18, 21 February 2018 (UTC)

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

Immediate Failures

• It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria - Y Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:56, 28 May 2019 (UTC)
• It contains copyright infringements - Copyvio unlikely Y Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:56, 28 May 2019 (UTC)
• It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include{{cleanup}}, {{POV}}, {{unreferenced}} or large numbers of {{citation needed}}, {{clarify}}, or similar tags. (See also {{QF-tags}}). - Y Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:56, 28 May 2019 (UTC)
• It is not stable due to edit warring on the page. - Y Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:56, 28 May 2019 (UTC)

Links

• No dablinks Y Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:56, 28 May 2019 (UTC)
• No external links Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:58, 28 May 2019 (UTC)

Prose

Lede

• Is the lack of infobox intentional? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:04, 28 May 2019 (UTC)

  No, but infoboxes are not really mandatory. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 08:25, 29 May 2019 (UTC)

• Lede is a little short, things like it's name and location could be better in the lede. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:04, 28 May 2019 (UTC)

  Expanded. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 08:25, 29 May 2019 (UTC)

• "Macdonald seamount is the active expression of Macdonald hotspot" - Seems like jargon to me. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:04, 28 May 2019 (UTC)

  Reworded this a bit. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 08:25, 29 May 2019 (UTC)

• Earthquake activity was recorded in 2007 - a weird simple sentence. I'd merge into sentence before. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:04, 28 May 2019 (UTC)

  Done. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 08:25, 29 May 2019 (UTC)

• morphology of the volcano - Jargon. Needs a wikilink/explination. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:04, 28 May 2019 (UTC)

  Reworded. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 08:25, 29 May 2019 (UTC)

Prose

• It is also known as Tamarii,[4] while Macdonald appears to be a misspelling. - Should probably explain that you mean the capitalisation of MacDonald. Strickly speaking, it's not a spelling mistake. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:10, 28 May 2019 (UTC)

  Fixed. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 08:25, 29 May 2019 (UTC)

• Why is it known as Tamarii? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:10, 28 May 2019 (UTC)

  I dunno. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 08:25, 29 May 2019 (UTC)

• The Pacific Ocean is characterized by the long island chains Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:10, 28 May 2019 (UTC)

  Made it less specific. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 08:25, 29 May 2019 (UTC)

• These sources are known as "hotspots" and there may be 42–117 in total on Earth. [6] - Seems like a weird range. Is the fact there is between 42 and 117 important? I'd remove. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:10, 28 May 2019 (UTC)

  Reworded this. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 08:25, 29 May 2019 (UTC)

• "cracks propagating in the crust" either needs explination/wikilinking - Jargon. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:10, 28 May 2019 (UTC)

  ​Wikilinked "crust"; "propagating cracks" means exactly what what a layperson would assume it means. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 08:25, 29 May 2019 (UTC)

Local setting

• Three paragraphs start "Macdonald seamount" in a row. I'd potentially reword the middle one to remove repetition. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:01, 29 May 2019 (UTC)

  Replaced one item. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 15:14, 29 May 2019 (UTC)

• Some of the paragraphs are pretty short, specifically the first one in Composition. Whilst not really bad, I'd prefer it either at the end of the section, or to be combined into a bigger paragraph. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:01, 29 May 2019 (UTC)

  Merged the first and the second. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 15:14, 29 May 2019 (UTC)

• Rest is pretty well written. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:01, 29 May 2019 (UTC)

GA Review

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Adding note that I'll be looking at these tjings tomorrow. JoJo Eumerus mobile (talk) 20:47, 28 May 2019 (UTC)

Passing GA. There's very little wrong here, and thanks for changing the things I've mentioned. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:06, 29 May 2019 (UTC)