Talk:Mahmoud Kahraba/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Courcelles in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 21:55, 27 July 2018 (UTC)Reply


  • I know it is in the lead, but we should still have a BLP-compliant citation after "was terminated with Luzern citing inappropriate behaviour."
  • "an option to make the deal permanent, in August 2013." Who had that option? Him? Luzern?
  • FC Zürich is the article title, with the diacritic.
  • Similarly, Grasshopper Club Zürich
  • "loan feal with" typo.
  • "he squad,[16] He " Either decapitalise "He" or turn that comma into a period.
  • "substitute infor place of"
  • "2–2 fraw with"
  • " squad for their UEFA Champions League " Should likely use the link to whichever UEFA CL this was, rather than to the general article.
  • "agreeing a transfer to" Agreeing to a transfer to
  • Wikilink Egyptian Pounds, better yet if you can convert it into hard currency.
  • "was fined 500,00 Egyptian pounds" Either that comma is in the wrong place, or we need an extra 0.
  • "Atletico" Make sure you're consistent with the diacritics on the e
  • "requires surgery." Requires? Future tense?
  • "defeats to Uruguay, Russia Saudi Arabia" Needs an and
  • Ref 2 needs more details and formatting.
  • Ref 51 needs an access date.
@Courcelles: Thanks for another review. I've addressed all of the issues above, let me know what you think. Kosack (talk) 06:50, 28 July 2018 (UTC)Reply