Talk:Mandy Mitchell-Innes/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MPJ-DK (talk · contribs) 21:33, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

I will be picking up the review of this one - both for the Wiki Cup and the GA cup as well. I will be making my review comments over the next couple of days.

Side note, I would love some input on a Featured List candidate (Mexican National Light Heavyweight Championship) and a Featured Article candidate (CMLL World Heavyweight Championship). I am not asking for Quid pro Quo, but all help is appreciated.  MPJ-US  21:33, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

GA Toolbox

I like to get this checked out first, I have found issues using this that has led to quick fails so it's important this passes muster.

Peer review tool

• No issues Y

Copyright violations Tool

• I don't see anything that's actually a problem Y

Disambiguation links

• No issues Y

External links

• Issues detected

• Two links are dead - marked in red
• Eight links are marked as "probably dead" - marked in orange
• ten sources, from britishnewspaperarchive.co.uk comes back as having connection issues - marked in blue

Well Written

Lead

• Should "top-score" be "top score"?
• "Oxford University, and appeared" does not need the comma
• "Service, and missed" again I don't think the comma is needed.

Early life

• It should be "Grandfather" not "Grand-father"
• "age of 5" should be "age of five"
• "each of 1932 and 1933" it may just be me but I would have put "in both 1932 and 1933"
• "at Oxford, and made" no comma needed

England Test recognition

• what does the term "rail-curtailed" mean?
• "MCC sent team to" do you mean "MCC sent a team to"?

Sources/verifiable

• Look okay I believe they're all reliable sources and the formatting is okay. Y

Broad in coverage

• This is where it's lacking - no details on what he did for the SPS? No details on what he did during the war? Those are two very obviou gaps in the article. Is there anything at all to fill those gaps??

Neutral

• Yes

Stable

• In the short history I am not seeing any edit warring or content disputes nor anything on the talk page. Y

Illustrated / Images

• Looks to be okay, fair use for the one picture is appropriate
• Info box image has no caption.
• If you are considering taking this to Feature Article at some point you have to remember to add "Alt" text.

• @Harrias: - that is the end of my review, I am putting the review on hold for up to seven days to allow you to make improvements. If you need more time than that please just let me know.  MPJ-US  04:13, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
  • @MPJ-DK: Thanks for the review. I've pretty much lost all enthusiasm for the encyclopaedia at the moment. I'd love to say that I'll get this done at the weekend, but in all likelihood I won't. I'll try my best, but if I don't get around to it, don't feel bad about closing it as a fail due to my inactivity. Harrias ^talk 18:45, 6 April 2016 (UTC)

• @Harrias: - I wanted to give you a bit of time in case your enthusiasm picked back up again, but since the weekend is basically over now and no work I will have to fail this one.  MPJ-US  01:21, 11 April 2016 (UTC)
  • @MPJ-DK:No worries at all. I've still got your review to work on should I have the desire to come back and get back on with things. Take care, Harrias ^talk 08:59, 11 April 2016 (UTC)