Talk:Margot Becke-Goehring/GA1
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Reviewer: Canada Hky (talk · contribs) 11:51, 18 April 2019 (UTC)
Hello - I am happy to review this article for GA status. I typically go through and make comments as I read, and then once most issues have been resolved / addressed, I run through the checklist to ensure I haven't missed anything. Canada Hky (talk) 11:51, 18 April 2019 (UTC)
Initial notes
editThis was an interesting article to read, I always appreciate the opportunity to learn about new chemists.
For some initial thoughts on improving this article potentially to GA status:
- The lead should be expanded. It should cover all of the high points of the article, so it needs to include education, work focus and any notable awards received.
- There is material in the infobox which is not included in the text, particularly a notable doctoral student.
- Many of these references should have the language added.
- A lot of the research section is linked to primary sources (the original research articles) - are there reviews or textbooks (secondary sources) that could be cited instead?
- For the new articles discovered, could there be a bit more context added as far as techniques, applications etc. A table may be beneficial. Secondary sources would be good here as well.
Thank you very much. I will try to work on your suggestions during the next days. --SolidStateHeini (talk) 20:32, 19 April 2019 (UTC)
I tried to include your suggestions. I hope it is better now. --SolidStateHeini (talk) 19:26, 20 April 2019 (UTC)
Second round
editDefinitely much improved - the sourcing to secondary sources is much improved and the article reads much better. I have made a few small tweaks, and then I have a couple of comments which I cannot address and need some help with:
- "She helped initiating BAFöG during that time and the student riots of 1968 happened during her time as a rector.[4][2] The riots largely stopped the university reforms that have been initiated by her" - These sentences could use a bit more inline expansion and explanation. A brief note about what BAFoG is, and also what the riots were about, and what measures she initiated that helped stop them.
- "Furthermore, she worked on eight-membered ring systems (e.g. heptasulfur imide S7NH[13] and N4S4F4), on six-membered rings (e.g. N3S3X3 (X=F,Cl) and N3[S(O)Cl]), and on ring systems with S, N and O as well as S, N and C." - As a chemist, I understand this sentence, but I think it may be confusing to a general audience, particularly the last portion wit the element symbols. Possibly writing out the elements in the last portion of the sentence, and combining it - 'ring systems involving combinations of sulfur, nitrogen and either oxygen or carbon'.
- Once the edits are largely complete - try to put the citations in numerical order at the end of sentences.
- I hope it is clearer now what Bafög is.
- I hope the part about the student reforms is clearer as well. I linked an article about the student riots in Germany in 1968.
- I included your suggestion on the research part and I sorted the references.
--SolidStateHeini (talk) 18:42, 21 April 2019 (UTC)
Thank you for your efforts, I made a few more grammar tweaks, but I think this article has been much improved, and now meets GA criteria. Canada Hky (talk) 15:59, 26 April 2019 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- No issues for the illustrative structure. The portrait is fair use, and all tagging and justification for fair use seems appropriate per my research.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail: