Talk:Maribojoc Church/GA1

Latest comment: 10 years ago by CaroleHenson in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: CaroleHenson (talk · contribs) 23:03, 6 October 2014 (UTC)Reply


Hello, I will start the review today and finish it within the next couple of days.--CaroleHenson (talk) 23:03, 6 October 2014 (UTC)Reply


Overview

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The article is well-written and paraphrased, with use of good-reliable sources. There are a few cases where there are citations missing and one source to improve, but the rest of the sources are great! It follows Manual of Style guidelines for sections, layout, etc. The article is stable. It covers the subject well, without going into unnecessary detail. It's told from a neutral point of view. The images are helpful to better know the now destroyed building. The images have suitable captions and have the appropriate licensing tags in commons.

Sources

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  • There are a couple of citation needed tags in a few areas. That helps us to know that there's no original research and that reliable, secondary sources were used.
* Done. Citation needed tags are replaced. --Carlojoseph14 (talk) 08:32, 7 October 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • There's also a tag on the "Rapper" article. It's a blog / op-ed kind of site that has editorial control over grammatical issues, but not content. It would be good to find a reliable, secondary source, such as a newspaper, book, journal, etc.

Content

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  • I have made some minor edits, added wikilinks, and changed the image layout so it didn't crowd the short sections here. See if you think they're helpful.
  • You may want to add something to the introduction about its history - how old it is, who built it.
  • Regarding "Missions were built in the settlement along the Abatan River at Viga" - Were there multiple missions built in a single settlement?
  • Overall there's good paraphrasing, but this bit is a direct quote and would be good to be reworded because its wording is somewhat unique, easy to spot: "an early church in a swampy area of the town proper"
  • Regarding "The church, made of coral stones under the Recollects, was built in 1852"... what happened to the church that was completed in 1816?
  • "The image of Santa Cruz (or Holy Cross), the town's patron" - is a cross really a town's patron?
  • This seems a little awkward - "The image of Santa Cruz (or Holy Cross), the town's patron, was located in a small shrine on top of another containing the wooden statue of San Vicente Ferrer, the town's secondary patron, on the central niche of the retablo-mayor." I don't know if it would help if the central niche part was said earlier. See what you think.

General comments

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Great article! I've really enjoyed reading it. I'll put the article on hold for seven days to allow you time to respond to the comments and make any necessary edits.--CaroleHenson (talk) 01:57, 7 October 2014 (UTC)Reply

  • Great work - the edits look good!
  • My only outstanding question now is the Rappler source... but I think that there's an easy solution. The fourth reference - the GMA New source with a full editorial staff - is a news article. And, it looks like that article covers the bit from Rappler. What do you think about replacing Rappler with the GMA citation, if that works?--CaroleHenson (talk) 08:46, 7 October 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • Ok, cool!
  • The pictures really bring home the devastation of the earthquake and the lone survivor (the statue). Wow! I've not seen a gallery as the first thing in a section, but it seems to work. The article looks good and "passes"!--CaroleHenson (talk) 17:12, 7 October 2014 (UTC)Reply