Talk:Mario Party 7/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: The Green Star Collector (talk · contribs) 23:11, 28 October 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: QuicoleJR (talk · contribs) 02:31, 10 November 2024 (UTC)

I'll claim this one. Ping me in a few days if I haven't reviewed it yet. QuicoleJR (talk) 02:31, 10 November 2024 (UTC)

Alright, I read through the article. It is overall very well-written, but I have a few concerns. QuicoleJR (talk) 19:03, 10 November 2024 (UTC)

Oops, forgot to ping. @The Green Star Collector: I have reviewed the article. QuicoleJR (talk) 22:13, 10 November 2024 (UTC)

Lead

• The first sentence in the second paragraph makes it sound like most games in the Mario Party series use the microphone, when I don't think many of them did.
• Mario Party 7 features characters of the Mario franchise This sounds weird to me. Also, maybe link the character list?

Gameplay

• An orb's effects can be self-inflicted, such as allowing the player to roll more than one die in a single turn, or directed toward a rival, such as deducting coins, orbs, or a Star, which may be given to the player who used the orb. This is a bit of a run-on sentence.
• Both Rare minigames must be purchased in-game to be unlocked. Just to be clear, Rare refers to the company, right?

Plot

• The first paragraph has sources, but the other two don't. It should be consistent, and since plot sections aren't required to have sources I'd recommend just removing them from the first paragraph.

Reception

• The reception section has quite a few quotes. Could you please try to paraphrase some of them?
• The fifth paragraph seems to be about the game’s presentation. Maybe you could make that a bit more clear? Starting every other paragraph with the topic and this one with the name of one of the reviewers is a bit strange.

Overall

• The article has been refbombed a bit. Typically you don't need more than one or two references for a statement, and more than three references are only needed if something is controversial or opinion-based. I'm going to wait on the spotcheck until this is addressed.

Thank you very much for your feedback, @QuicoleJR:

• I've rephrased part of the lead to (hopefully) make it clearer that the minigame add-on is only implemented in Mario Party 6 and Mario Party 7.
• Changed characters of the Mario franchise to characters from the Mario franchise and added the appropriate link to List of Mario franchise characters.
• Split the run-on sentence in the gameplay section into two sentences to try to make the orbs' effects on opponents clearer.
• Just to be clear, Rare refers to the company, right? It does not, actually. "Rare" is one of the nine categories of minigames. Perhaps quotation marks could be added to make that clearer?
• Removed all citations from the plot section.
• Paraphrased several parts of the reception section and restructured the fifth paragraph to make it clearer that it is about the game's presentation.
• Cut all citation bundles down to three or fewer, except for one or two statements I've seen disagreement or confusion about. (From now on, I'll keep it to this limit—five was my initial cap in almost all cases.) Please let me know if this can be improved further. Otherwise, I welcome the spotcheck. ★ The Green Star Collector ★ (talk) 03:00, 11 November 2024 (UTC)