Talk:Mark DeRosa

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The comment(s) below were originally left at Talk:Mark DeRosa/Comments, and are posted here for posterity. Following several discussions in past years, these subpages are now deprecated. The comments may be irrelevant or outdated; if so, please feel free to remove this section.

I believe that Mark DeRosa's wife is linked to the wrong wiki page.

Substituted at 05:12, 13 May 2016 (UTC)

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GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 21:23, 9 October 2021 (UTC)Reply


I was going to wait until Clint Courtney had been promoted, but I've been going "why do I know that name" for so long – turns out we have the same alma mater! — GhostRiver 21:23, 9 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Good Article review progress box
Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

Infobox and lede

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High school and college

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  • "Descended from Italian immigrants, his parents were father Jack and mother Mickey." → "His parents Jack and Mickey were the descendants of Italian immigrants."
  • Link "Italian immigrants" to Italian diaspora
  • It looks like DeRosa's father played for the Fairleigh Dickinson Knights
  • Ok, I know I'm going to be incredibly annoying, but: in the sentence about Don Mattingly, switch the two refs, and do so again for the last sentence of the first paragraph. That way, you have [2][5] and [5][7] rather than [5][2] and [7][5]
  • Link football to American football
  • He's one of the top QBs in Penn history because our football team is so bad and has been since he graduated
  • Absolutely shocked that the Wharton baseball guy was in Sig
  • "marketing until he graduated from UPenn's" → "marketing, graduating from the"

MLB career

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  • Overall, since he played for so many teams, having the years in the subheads might be helpful

Atlanta Braves

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  • This section is so much larger than the rest, it could benefit from some subsections; I'll let you decide where and how many
  • "he had three RBI (his only ones of the season)" → "he recorded his only three RBI of the season"
  • "then was called up for the remainder of the season in September."
  • Amazingly it took until the third paragraph of this section to get to the term "home run", which should be linked accordingly
  • "Tendon sheath" should be linked up here and then delinked down below
  • "that the poor defensive performance"
  • "Watching videotapes"

Texas Rangers

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  • "DeRosa then signed with the Texas Rangers on January 19, 2005, but on a minor league contract, as there were questions as to his health." → "On January 19, 2005, the Texas Rangers signed DeRosa to a minor league contract, with some concerns about his health."
  • The "He responded to this" feels a bit awkward when reading over the source – seems to imply that the "this" is becoming an everyday second baseman, whereas the source talks about how he is still a utility player (or, as they put it, "an everyday starter without an everyday position")

Chicago Cubs

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  • "DeRosa chose the Cubs because Chicago wanted to use him regularly at second base." → "Chicago offered DeRosa the chance to start regularly at second base, an option that he preferred."
  • "However, he again" → "Despite this, he again"
  • "was taken to a hospital because he was having trouble breathing and suffering from a rapid heart beat." → "was hospitalized with breathing difficulties and a rapid heartbeat"
  • "on www.cubs.com" → "on the Cubs' website."
  • "becoming the first Cub to do so"
  • "the only Cub runs" → "the only Cubs runs"
  • "felt was way harder to take" → "found more disappointing"

Cleveland Indians

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St. Louis Cardinals

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  • "Soon after his acquisition, however,"
  • "the second time he had done so that season" → "for the second time that season"
  • "After the season, he underwent surgery to repair a torn tendon sheath in his left wrist.[83] He also became a free agent." → "DeRosa, who became a free agent at the end of the year, used the offseason to undergo surgery that repaired a torn tendon sheath in his left wrist."

San Francisco Giants

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  • Single-sentence paragraphs are generally discouraged; I see no reason why this can't just start off the paragraph below it
  • "he began the 2011 season"
  • Comma after the quote from Baggarly
  • But DeRosa, who had torn a wrist tendon on that checked swing, The tear is listed earlier; suggest something like "DeRosa instead"

Washington Nationals

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  • Ditto above with regards to single-sentence paras
  • Maybe worth specifying how old he was when he was with the Nats

Toronto Blue Jays

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  • "that he was retiring." → "that he would retire after 16 years in MLB."

Career statistics

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  • Good

Personal life and post-playing career

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  • "born two-and-a-half-months early" → "born prematurely by two and a half months" (with the WL)
  • "in a hospital" → "in the hospital"
  • "is one of his favorite bands to listen to"
  • Both MLB: The Show and MLB The Show 18 should be italicized

References

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  • There are a few instances where the location (e.g. Newport, VA) is used in parentheses in the "work" parameter where they should be in the "location" param – I see this in [35], [41], [43], [55], [85], and [105]
  • [61] needs a work parameter

General comments

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  • All photos are properly licensed and are relevant to the article
  • No stability concerns in the revision history
  • Copyvio score looks good at 17.4%

Fight on, Pennsylvania! — GhostRiver 22:42, 9 October 2021 (UTC)Reply