Talk:Martha Is Dead

Latest comment: 1 year ago by Wikibenboy94 in topic Review

Proposed merge of Draft:Martha is Dead into Martha is Dead

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Draft is more detailed than article, and should be folded into article. Robert McClenon (talk) 14:24, 10 May 2023 (UTC)Reply

@Robert McClenon: seems it has already been done, though I am not sure how well. Curb Safe Charmer (talk) 14:26, 10 May 2023 (UTC)Reply
User:Curb Safe Charmer - Yes. It appears that the author of the draft copied most of the contents of the draft into the article at the same time as I was tagging the pages for merge, which was a race condition. I will change the tags to ask for a check of the merge.
This was an unusual case where two versions were developed independently, one in article space and one in draft space, and the version in draft space was more complete. Usually when there are both an article and a draft, they have common history; in this case, they did not, just two editors writing about the same game. Robert McClenon (talk) 14:36, 10 May 2023 (UTC)Reply

Review

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This game was the subject of a draft and a mainspace article, and the draft was more detailed. The draft has been merged into the article. A third-person review would be desirable to verify that the merging has been done appropriately. Robert McClenon (talk) 14:40, 10 May 2023 (UTC)Reply

@Robert McClenon: I just wanted to give my thoughts on the current quality of this article. Taking into account that the greater length of a draft over the original article is one reason for a merger, and while efforts can obviously be made to improve the article afterwards, are drafts ever typically reviewed before merging, because in this case so much of the prose in this article is unnecessary, poorly-sourced (or using questionable sources), and often violates WP:NPOV, typically through puffery. To break this down, the most glaring issues are:
  • Development is wholly excessive and split into several subsections where only one is really necessary. If possible, the prose detailing comparisons with The Town of Light and an overview of Martha Is Dead's graphics should be relegated to a few sentences at most. "Content" is closely tied with gameplay, so should fall under that respective section.
  • The game's characters are described in great detail with their own subsections. If they do have to be outlined, this should only ever be under a section detailing the setting of the game.
  • Reception is disorganised and suffers from various problems. As a brief overview, random summarised reviews are directly attributed to IGN, Metacritic, Steam (WP:USERG), and OpenCritic, and a host of awards are listed that are mostly from non-notable awarding bodies and ceremonies.
  • The end of the article (errenously titled "Impact") has another unnecessary section discussing the game's themes that is essentially completely unsourced. Again, if it can be sourced, this should should only have a brief mention, either under Gameplay or Development.
While I don't wish to disregard the efforts of the user who I imagine spent considerable time creating the draft, ultimately there is a lot to it that I don't think should remain, and alternatively contains details that might be a struggle to reliably source. Wikibenboy94 (talk) 22:23, 25 June 2023 (UTC)Reply
Pinging @Robert McClenon: as not sure if the first went through. Wikibenboy94 (talk) 12:24, 9 July 2023 (UTC)Reply
A large portion of the current content needs to be outright deleted for being either unencyclopedic levels of plot summary, improper tone, WP:SYNTH, or WP:PROMO. I wouldn't hesitate to just delete whatever is causing problems to immediately triage the article, then look to see if anything can be re-integrated. The Characters, Impact and every Development section besides "Origins" should be canned, and it lists too many awards. ᴢxᴄᴠʙɴᴍ () 20:09, 4 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
It see it was reverted back to its original state, which also makes sense. Any parts of the draft that may have been salvageable should be very selectively integrated back, if any. ᴢxᴄᴠʙɴᴍ () 20:29, 4 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
I earlier raised the issue over at WT:VG. When I have a spare moment I'll see if there was anything that might be considered acceptable, but I don't think it'll amount to much. Wikibenboy94 (talk) 21:45, 4 October 2023 (UTC)Reply