Talk:Mary Treglia
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Z1720 in topic Did you know nomination
 | A fact from Mary Treglia appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 30 May 2021 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:
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Did you know nomination
edit- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Z1720 (talk) 02:42, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
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... that social worker Mary Treglia, who helped immigrants in Sioux City, Iowa, was initiated by "baseball and ravioli dinners" rather than a "baptism by fire"?
- Reviewed: compressed instruction set
5x expanded by SL93 (talk). Self-nominated at 03:22, 4 May 2021 (UTC).
It's expanded properly, no plagiarism etc., new enough--but I'm not totally getting it. First of all the article is somewhat unusually organized; it's odd to have a biography like this with a "personal life". Regular chronology seems much more helpful to me, especially since the Career part kind of comes out of nowhere (and I find the lead a bit odd as well, starting with what seems to be a mere factoid about baseball, which doesn't become relevant until the last section). But above all I don't get the hook--SL93, it's not very hooky, it's not very clear, and after having looked at the source I'm not sure what more can be pulled out of this to make it more exciting. Drmies (talk) 01:05, 5 May 2021 (UTC)
- @Drmies: I changed it to chronological order.
- ALT1: ... that social worker Mary Treglia died before the "ironically" named Mary J. Treglia Urban Renewal Project razed the Sioux City, Iowa neighborhood of immigrants who she helped during her life? SL93 (talk) 01:18, 5 May 2021 (UTC)
I'm fine with it, though it is possible that somewhere along the line someone might have a problem with "ironically". Drmies (talk) 01:36, 5 May 2021 (UTC)
- @Drmies: I took ironically from the source. I guess I could quote it to make it clear. SL93 (talk) 01:37, 5 May 2021 (UTC)