Talk:Mastophora hutchinsoni

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  This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 15 September 2020 and 17 December 2020. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Davidcho122. Peer reviewers: Cjing99, Stomatz, SatvikR78.

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(10/20/20) I have extensively added information on M. hutchinsoni including an introduction, phylogeny, population structure, habitat and geographic distribution, the different diets of the adult female, male, and spiderlings while integrating the hunting behavior and main mimicry mechanism of the female, egg formation and placement, mating behaviors, protective coloration, physiology with the composition of the moths' pheromones and detection mechanism of wing vibrations, and the bites to the prey. Moreover, I added eight scientific primary references and matched information accordingly. I have also added four appropriate images and hyperlinked lingo or terms that could use additional information. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Davidcho122 (talkcontribs) 02:01, 21 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

This article is off to a good start - just from reading some research papers on this species, it is evident you have covered a good amount of information that is known about this spider. I rearranged some of your sections, and added a "Description" section. I also added an additional source regarding adult females moth consumption. Cjing99 (talk) 00:43, 31 October 2020 (UTC)Reply


This article was really informative, and I think you did a particularly good job explaining the unique trait of pheromone mimicry. I broke up your distribution and habitat sections by headings so that it is easier to find the information. When it was all in one paragraph before, it felt like there was a lack of cohesiveness which makes sense because you're talking about two different things. I made your "Diet" heading "Diet and Predation", because you are describing how predation happens and what the predatory habits are of the spider in that section, and I don't see information about that elsewhere in the article. In your "Wing Vibration" section, I took out the "researchers found.." part because in a wiki article you are supposed to just say it as it is. One suggestion I have is that there could be a Behavior section, and in that section you could include the "Diet and Predation", "Webs", and "Mating" sections. Right now there's a lot of great Behavioral information but it's tough to find. Overall, great work and it was really easy to learn a ton from your article! SatvikR78(talk) 1:30, 3 November 2020 (UTC)

This was a really well-written and informational article that required little change (I enjoyed reading about all of the pheromone mimicry). I added a citation to the lead section and added a few links to words such pheromone and instar. Additionally, I un-italicized the names for phylum, class, order, and family for both the spider species and moth families mentioned. I made some minor grammatical changes to eliminate some unnecessary em dashes, semicolons, and superfluous words in order to generate more concise sentences. I also removed wording, such as “research that proved,” that made sentences less succinct (also less in-line with Wikipedia guidelines). You might want to take another look at the distribution section, as it only discusses North American ranges despite a broader distribution described in the lead section, which was a bit confusing. I also reworded parts of the male diet section, but it might be worth taking another look at this section, as the wording might still be a bit ambiguous. Stomatz (talk) 04:34, 4 November 2020 (UTC)Reply