Talk:Maternal health in Uganda

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Also, to create an outline that shows the desired main sections and subsections, please use the = signs. You seem to have used 3 = for main sections; then you need to use 4 = for subsections of each of those main sections. BerikG (talk) 22:08, 20 April 2012 (UTC)BerikG

Due to a confusion of my part I removed myself from reviewing the article, but i'll give some brief comments just in case my actions cause other unintended consequences. I would add a lead section to summarize the content. I mentioned this in the Angola review, but I'd be careful about coatracking here as well. It's not appropriate to title the article in one sense, and then discuss it in another. Also there are POV concerns as to "Why it Matters". The last sentence of #1 section needs a citation, be wary of the crystal ball. Thekappen (talk) 07:16, 24 April 2012 (UTC)

The first two introductory statements should highlight key definitions of the meaning of maternal health with a transition into the burden by maternal health indicators in Uganda. Since the third sentence was perfectly stated hence would make the perfect transitional statement. Ronug (talk) 18:41, 25 July 2019 (UTC)

Citations for verification of the first two statements is warranted or needed. Ronug (talk) 18:41, 25 July 2019 (UTC)

Regarding structure of this article, we need to think of a framework generally acceptable to frame this article on maternal health in Uganda. This is a topic so broad that it can take any shape from different perspectives. For example using a WHO health systems framework to guide the domains for discussion. Ronug (talk) 19:15, 8 September 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review

I think this article was pretty good. I think there should be an introductory paragraph because it seems to be the wikipedia style, but also because it is nice to get an idea of the summary before i read the whole thing. It would also be nice to hear about from other economists other than Sen in the section of why it matters. It does matter, but there would be more credit given if more than one economists was quoted. The sentence "A needs assessment of emergency obstetric care was carried out in 197 health facilities in 19 out of 5 health districts in Uganda, covering 38% of the total population." in the second paragraph under Cultural Barriers in Seeking Access, the fact seems off. It doesn't make sense to me. I think there is a better way to say it. It seems that it is a very cultural centered event, giving birth in Uganda. Many of the suggestions seem good, but do not address the the cultural and historical aspect of some of these problems. These solutions may be "uneducated" for wikipedia or not really considered yet. But good article overall.Bryner2 (talk) 00:18, 24 April 2012 (UTC)

Peer Review

Very nice article, I only saw one potential grammatical error. Under the "Poor Quality of Healthcare Services" section on the second line the words skill health care provider. You may want to move the words around a little. I was surprised at the similarities between Uganda and Angola. However, a lot of differences in the culture and traditions in the two countries involving pregnancy and childbirth exists as well. You did a good job incorporating Sen into your article. You can include a link about Mr. Sen to another site in Wikipedia if you would like because he has a page devoted to his life and work. It also would be very interesting to compare live birth rates today in Uganda compared with the rates ten or twenty years ago. It is difficult to compare the rates of infant mortality and mother mortality in Angola because records did not exist in many places during the civil war. Also the United States has a anti-malaria program that a lot of African countries are using to decreace the prevelance of malaria. I am not sure but Uganda may be participating and if they are you could find more statistics involving the numbers of maternal deaths due to malaria in Uganda through that report. Very interesting paper and topic. The sources you have are also very good.Haskimas B Naskasi (talk) 04:21, 24 April 2012 (UTC)

Updated maternal mortality ratio in Uganda

The MMR in Uganda reduced from 435 to 343 maternal deaths per 100,000 live births. One maternal death is too high and yet Uganda still suffers from a very high ratio MMR of 343. Ronug (talk) 19:38, 25 July 2019 (UTC)

Notes on First Section

As the first sentence of the article, start with a sentence on maternal health, something like, "Just as being healthy is a fundamental right, so is enjoying health during pregnancy and childbirth." The second paragraph that starts with Sen needs a) page number for the quotation from Sen; b) a citation for the UNICEF source; c) year for the statistics reported (e.g. 1 in 16 etc.) Remember to follow these documentation rules throughout your article. Sen (2001) also discusses the importance of maternal health for children's health (cardiovascular disease in old age is connected to poor health of women during pregnancy.)BerikG (talk) 04:16, 27 April 2012 (UTC)BerikG

Limited reproductive health literacy

The statement "Only 19% of women in the study could indicate at least three danger signs.[19]" though verifiable is a primary source. Ronug (talk) 19:19, 25 July 2019 (UTC)

Notes on citations with primary sources

Of note is that several citations quote primary sources and so respectful editing is warranted. Ronug (talk) 19:19, 25 July 2019 (UTC)

Human Development Report 2011 as a source

You can add a discussion of the latest statistics based on Table 4 of HDR 2011 p. 141 (Uganda) and p. 142 (definitions). While there are recent statistics in the article, those reported in Table 4 will allow you connect the basic aspects of maternal health--reproductive health, maternal mortality rate, total fertility rate, and adolescent fertility rate--to other dimensions of women's status. You can write a paragraph describing the current situation in Uganda (or integrate in the current text a few paragraphs) along the following lines: First identify the causal connections between these variables (e.g. high MMR is associated with frequent pregnancy/high total fertility rate, which in turn is associated with low contraceptive prevalence. The % of pregnant women visit skilled health personnel will also be associated with MMR. Then, write another paragraph explaining how Uganda compares to the averages for Sub-Saharan Africa and/or Low HDI countries (p. 142). Third, you can write another paragraph to illustrate the consequences of (poor) maternal health in Uganda as reflected in other columns for Uganda: intrinsically, there is the capability of life for women (MMR), of course, but this is also connected to other capabilities and important resources for women (i.e. LFP of women--ability to earn a living; ability to seek education/schooling; ability to be elected to office/women in parliament), and these latter indicators are instrumentally related to how the country does on the whole: Poor health for women means low economic achievement for the country (just as low economic development constrains women's capabilities to achieve better health). Here you could add Uganda's HDI rank out of # of countries and its GII rank. Remember to start a few of these sentences with "According to the Human Development Report 2011, Uganda..." and add the reference at the end.

Incidentally, be sure to put your references after the punctuation. There is unevenness at present. BerikG (talk) 04:43, 27 April 2012 (UTC)BerikG

The article needs a lead paragraph on Maternal Health in Uganda. As thekappen notes, readers have to grasp in a nutshell what the issues are in a short paragraph. As it is, Uganda is not mentioned until the section section. BerikG (talk) 16:26, 30 April 2012 (UTC)BerikG

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