Talk:Mathieu Perreault/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kncny11 (talk · contribs) 19:18, 23 May 2021 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I can pop a look at this after I do some work! Kncny11 ^(shoot) 19:18, 23 May 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

• "and, during the 2012–13 NHL lockout, for the HIFK of the Finnish SM-liiga"  Done
• replace hyphen with en dash for Acadie–Bathurst Titan  Done
• add acronym after Quebec Major Junior Hockey League, since you use it in the next sentence  Done
• "Capital's" → "Capitals'"  Done
• Overall a bit short  Done

Early life

• add NHL acronym after first instance of National Hockey League  Done

Playing career

Amateur

• Delink minor ice hockey at the end of first paragraph  Done
• Same thing with the en dash for the Titan  Done
• Pipe "major junior" to junior ice hockey  Done
• WL first instances of "goals" and "assists"  Done
• If the team is the Titan, then wouldn't it be pluralized as Titan? (I'm thinking of, say, the Utah Jazz or Miami Heat). If not, then there are still possessives where there should be plurals
• "6 goals and 8 assists" → "six goals and eight assists" per MOS:NUMBER  Done
• the league Second-Team All-Star, I presume?  Done
• acronym for AHL after its introduction  Done

Professional

• The following season, Perreault split his time during the 2009-10 season this reads awkwardly  Done
• Missing en dash for "in the 3–2 loss"  Done
• WL two-way contract  Done
• Missing en dash for "during a 1–0 win"  Done
• WL Dallas Stars  Done
• Missing en dash for "during a 4–2 win over the Chicago Blackhawks"  Done
• Now that the 2020–21 regular season has concluded, I'd like some more detail there

Personal life

• Good

References

• Disambiguate La Presse as La Presse (Canadian newspaper) in ref [28]  Done
• Washington Post is inconsistently listed as work or publisher, and should be linked in the first instance (25)  Done
• In [22], "pennlive.com" should become The Patriot-News  Done
• Ref [4] is inconsistent with the other nhl.com citations  Done
• In [42], Toronto Sun should be listed as work rather than publisher, and should be wikilinked  Done
• In [44], change "si.com" to "Sports Illustrated" to match [2]  Done
• In [48], Winnipeg Sun should be listed as work rather than publisher, and should be wikilinked  Done
• Same thing with [50], minus the WL  Done
• The Province and Winnipeg Free Press should be italicized and linked in [53] and [57], respectively  Done
  • It won't let me italicize
• Archive references wherever possible using the tool  Done

General comments

• Sources are all to reliable publications
• Appropriately focused and neutral
• Pictures all look good
• Stability looks good
• Earwig looks good at 16.7%, and that's due to a direct quote

Outsider looking in: please consider a bunch of minor edits to the templates. A URL for the homepage of a publication is usually unnecessary, if there is an actual name--like here for Sports Illustrated, and here for that Hockey magazine, and for the Quebec Major Junior Hockey League. That kind of thing ends up, in the template, putting that URL in italics and then the name in regular font. For the hockey league the name should probably not be italicized, but (I'm looking at this version) in note 29 "Washington Post" should be italicized (it is in note 25), and in 23 "The Columbian" also needs to be in italics. OK, for note 56, the Kovacs article, same problem: a needless URL, in italics, and the name of the publication, not in italics.

I strongly recommend that all the templates are scrutinized, because, to summarize, there are needless URLs in there, there are inconsistencies, and there are errors in italicization. It's time-consuming, but for a GA, it's a must. Drmies (talk) 01:42, 26 May 2021 (UTC) Checking in now that my head doesn't want to murder me. Pretty much everything has been addressed. Few more quick quibbles, mostly reference stuff:

• [3] is listed as "theqmjhl.ca" under "work", the rest have "Quebec Major Junior Hockey League" listed under "publisher"  Done
• [17] and [20] are missing a work and/or publisher Done
• What I meant with "italicize" was to change the param from "publisher" to "work". Apologies if that was unclear
• Now that the Jets are out of the playoffs (womp womp), a sentence or two about his playoff career would be aces.  Done
• Probably also worth mentioning that his contract expires at the end of the season  Done

Kncny11, done. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 23:10, 14 June 2021 (UTC)

HickoryOughtShirt?4 Thank you for your patience, promoting now Kncny11 ^(shoot) 00:15, 15 June 2021 (UTC)