Talk:Max (The X-Files)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 02:36, 4 May 2012 (UTC)

• Infobox: Add a cite for cast
• Intro: "and saw the final appearance of Brendan Beiser as Pendrell" Maybe say 'Agent' Pendrell or 'FBI Special Agent Pendrell' or something
• Intro: "artefact" since The X-Files is an American show, this should be spelled 'artifact'
• Intro: "Manners has praised the large cast…" I would remove the 'has'
• Intro: "finding them to be the best he had worked with." -> "concluding that they were the best he had worked with."
• Plot: Do you think a "background" section under plot would be a good idea?
• Production: "Actor Brendan Beiser has portrayed the character in eight other episodes," -> "Actor Brendan Beiser portrayed the character in eight other episodes,"
• Production: I'd remove the mention that Duchovny played Mulder
• Production: "Manners commented that the acting crew was more tired than usual because of it, and that Duchovny was able to run from two horses when filming the episode "Tunguska", but was unable here to run from two men." Is this in real life, or is he talking about a plot hole in the series?
• Production: "Executive producer John Shiban was asked to write a speech for Garrett in the scene in which Mulder encounters him on the airplane, and Shiban remembered a speech given by Orson Welles in The Third Man. Shiban wrote a similar speech in homage to this scene." -> "Executive producer John Shiban was asked to write a speech for Garrett in the scene in which Mulder encounters him on the airplane. Inspired by a speech given by Orson Welles in The Third Man, Shiban wrote the speech as an homage to the movie."
• Production: "The scenes of the airplane's final airborne moments included eighty extras who Manners felt were "eighty of the best extras I've ever worked with in my life";[6] several extras were as young as four years old." Maybe break into two sentences. That ';' and the citation bugs me. :P
• Reception: Link Robert Shearman and Lars Pearson

Those are the only issues. On hold.--Gen. Quon (talk) 02:47, 4 May 2012 (UTC)

• • Thanks for getting to this one so quickly. I think I've seen to everything you've raised, let me know if I've missed anything. GRAPPLE X 03:51, 4 May 2012 (UTC)
    • Looks good! I'll pass.--Gen. Quon (talk) 04:00, 4 May 2012 (UTC)