Talk:May Childs Nerney/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: BennyOnTheLoose (talk · contribs) 19:06, 31 October 2021 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Copyvio/Plagiarism check - all good. I reviewed matches above 5% on Earwig's Copyvio Detector and the only matches were titles etc.

Images - Image used is appropriate and appears to be legitimately public domain.

Early life

• "Nerney received degrees from Cornell University in 1902 and,[2] three years later," - I'd suggest moving the cite, to something like "Nerney received degrees from Cornell University in 1902,[2] and, three years later," as source 2 is supporting the 1902 not the "and"; or just move the cite next to 3 and 4, maybe employing a WP:CITEBUNDLE.

• moved as per the first suggestion

• I'm not sure how long a source can be before page refs should be provided, so I'll say optionally you could add the page ref (p.83) for the Hansen source.

• Oh yeah, I should. Added. I saw a discussion on WT:FAC that >10 is a pretty good guideline

NAACP involvement

• You could wikilink intellectual

• sure

• Although Rudwick and Meier are both wikilinked, you could consider a brief introduction for them, something like "In 1967, historians Elliott Rudwick and August Meier ..."

• Done

• "She personally traveled around the country" - I don't have access to the source, is there any more detail available, e.g. something that helps quantify this?

• Unfortunately, no

• I note that MOS:PEOPLANG says "there is no consensus against what is sometimes perceived as inconsistency in the same article (Black but white)"

• I've used the style I've seen increasingly common lately but am not wedded to it.

Thomas Edison

• "At 334 pages, Nerney wrote it because she did not think an adequate biography of Edison had been written." - doesn't quite read right to me.

• It's, I think a, consequence of over-eager paraphrasing. Rephrased

• Add a comma after "Nerney had interviewed Edison for the book", or do something else to meet MOS:CITEPUNCT for ref 28.

• Comma added

Breadth and depth are appropriate, based on what I've seen in sources. I couldn't access all sources used, but did some spot checks on those I could and found no issues. NPOV maintained.

I don't have much to say here, except good work, Eddie891, and many thanks to Alanna the Brave for the pre-review. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 20:30, 31 October 2021 (UTC)

Thanks @BennyOnTheLoose, what do you think now? Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 20:36, 31 October 2021 (UTC)

• Thanks, Eddie891. Happy to pass this for GA now. (I just ran a script for dashes, as I'd forgotten to check those.) Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 20:44, 31 October 2021 (UTC)