Talk:Me Gusta (Inna song)/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Cartoon network freak in topic GA Review

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 01:51, 23 March 2018 (UTC)Reply

Lead and infobox
  • For the English translation of the song, I would captialize “Like” too, as “Gusta” is captialized in the original title.
  • For this part (Written by the singer and produced by David Ciente,), I would say “Inna” instead of “the singer”.
  • I am not sure if “Spanish language” needs to be linked here.
  • For this sentence (Lyrically, Inna admires the presence and dance abilities of a male she feels attracted to.), I would use “man” instead of “male”. The term “male” sounds too clinical to me for this context.
  • For this part (praising its production, catchiness and predicting its commercial success), it should be “its production and catchiness” as you do not include another item in the list for the verb “praising”.
  • For this part (it portrays Inna performing to the track on streets of the aforementioned cities), I would say “shows” rather than “portrays”. Something about “portrays” makes me think more of a film or an acting part, and the video is more a free-form performance bit.
  • For the sake of concise language, I would cut this sentence (Shot in Bucharest and Barcelona by Barna Nemethi, it portrays Inna performing to the track on streets of the aforementioned cities.) down to this suggestion (Shot by Barna Nemethi, it shows Inna performing to the track on streets of Bucharest and Barcelona.).
  • For this sentence ( For further promotion, the singer sang "Me Gusta" on Romanian radio station Radio ZU in April 2017, before its release.), I would cut the end bit (i.e. “before it release”) as it is already clear from the date (i.e. “April 2017) that it was performed before its release.
Background and release
  • I would cut this sentence ("Me Gusta" was solely written by Inna, while production was handled by David Ciente, whom the singer previously worked with on "Gimme Gimme" (2017) and "Ruleta" (2017).) into two. For the second sentence, I would say “The singer previously worked with Ciente on the 2017 singles "Gimme Gimme" and "Ruleta".) and keep the beginning part the same.
  • Again, I do not believe that “Spanish language” needs to be linked here.
  • For this sentence (David Moreno of 20 minutos wrote that "Me Gusta" implied an Asian sound.), the word “implied” does not make sense in this context.
  • For this sentence (Lyrically, the track's lyrics revolve around "Inna lik[ing] this guy when he's dancing, and she hasn't felt this way about him for some time, and that his dancing always cheers her up.”), attribute in the text who wrote or said this quote. Was it Inna, Ciente, a critic, or someone else?
  • I would revise this part ("Me Gusta" was digitally made available as a single on 14 February 2018 on Valentine's Day) to ("Me Gusta" was digitally made available as a single on 14 February 2018 (Valentine’s Day)) to be more concise.
  • This part ( lasting three minutes and 54 seconds.) is rather awkwardly added to the end of the song. If you want to include the time duration of the song, I would include in a sentence that talks about its composition, such as this sentence ( It is a Spanish language song, featuring an electronic production and beat drops). It does not make sense to add the time duration in a sentence on the date of its release.
  • I would revise this part (It was originally expected to be released before "Ruleta" by fans and publications) to (Fans and publications originally expected it to be released before “Ruleta") to avoid the passive voice.
  • I would cut the “before its availability” part as it is clear from the rest of the sentence that this is the case. There is no reason to doubt the reader’s intelligence about this.
Critical reception
  • You use the word “praised” three times in this paragraph. I would vary the language to avoid repetition.
  • For this sentence (Kevin Apaza, writing for Direct Lyrics, praised the track's production, drops and "summery, festive" vibe, although slightly criticizing its construction.), I would use “but slightly criticized its composition” as the current phrasing is somewhat awkward.
  • I would paraphrase this quote ("at the beginning, [he] did not like [the song] too much”).
  • I would include the more mixed reviews (i.e. Direct Lyrics and 20 minutos) at the end of the paragraph to give it more structure.
Music video
  • For this sentence (Marius Apopei and John Perez were credited as the clip's directors of photography, while Anca Buldur and Adonis Enache performed make-up and hair styling.), please include a reference at the end. The next sentence includes multiple references so it is unclear which reference supports this information.
  • For this part (Direct Lyrics's Apaza praised its summery vibe and resumed its plot:), the word “resumed” does not make sense in this context.
Credits and personnel
  • I would include a section for this with the known information about the song.
Final comments
@Aoba47: Hi there and thank you (again) for the review! Yes, I also love Inna's current musical direction more than the I Am the Club Rocker era, and I think the majority of her fans do too. However, her old music brings back so many memories; I remember being like 7 or 8 and listening to "Sun Is Up" or "Amazing" on Romanian television. Things are different now as I live in Germany, where Inna has no success.... Bouncing back to the review, I think I have solved all your queries raised above ! Best; Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:35, 23 March 2018 (UTC)Reply
Verdict
  • Thank you for addressing everything. I will  Pass this. I understand what you mean. Old music can bring back so many memories. It would be interesting to see how Inna's music career progresses in the future. It is a shame that this did not chart anywhere.
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