Talk:Merry Christmas II You/GA1

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Reviewer: Azealia911 (talk · contribs) 16:42, 19 September 2015 (UTC)

Hello, I'm Azealia911 _talk and I'll be reviewing this article against the good article criteria. I'm happy to inform you that this article does not meet the grounds for an immediate failure, so a full, thorough review is to come within 48 hours. Thankyou, Azealia911 _talk 16:42, 19 September 2015 (UTC)

Thanks.  — Calvin999 18:47, 19 September 2015 (UTC)

Comment: Bill Lamb of About.com is a grossly unrelaible source per WP:ALBUM/SOURCES. I tried removing it, but my edits keep glitching for some reason. CoolMarc 06:21, 20 September 2015 (UTC)

Not according to Wikipedia:WikiProject Albums/Sources/About.com Critics Table.  — Calvin999 10:17, 20 September 2015 (UTC)

Oh OK, my mistake. He was considered unreliable for quite some time, but I see this has now recently changed. Thanks for pointing out. CoolMarc 11:39, 20 September 2015 (UTC)

Here's part of my review, I was originally going to do a full review all at once, but I'll be a little busy over the next few days. Here's the preliminary stuff, any blank section will be added to shortly . Azealia911 _talk 21:56, 21 September 2015 (UTC)

General

• MoS:DASH violations in reference titles.
• No 'Release history' section, even though there's different versions of the album?
  • I used prose instead.  — Calvin999 18:33, 22 September 2015 (UTC)
• All of the images, including the cover artwork, need alts, and please don't make them describing the persons fashion.

 Done  — Calvin999 18:35, 22 September 2015 (UTC)

Lead and infobox

• Cover art needs an ALT
• Link Christmas album and studio album
• "It received mixed reviews" → "The album received mixed reviews"
• The word "sentimental" only appears in this sentence, so who exactly thought it was sentimental?
• Need a comma after (RIAA).
• "It missed out on the top one-hundred in the United Kingdom." → I'd suggest "It missed out on the top one-hundred in the United Kingdom by one spot, peaking at 101 on the albums chart." or something similar. Not everyone realizes there's more than 100 places, and this could be interpreted to mean that it didn't chart in the UK at all.

 Done  — Calvin999 19:29, 22 September 2015 (UTC)

Background and production

• Remove the space in "Shobiz 411"
• saying → stating
• Unlink the second use of Showbiz411

 Done  — Calvin999 16:02, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

Composition

• "The third track" add 'of the album'
• Could you possible trim the quote at the end of the paragraph that begins with "Track five"?
  • Well, it's lyrics, not a quote from a critic.  — Calvin999 16:02, 24 September 2015 (UTC)
• "The seventh track" add 'on the album'
• Link About.com

 Done  — Calvin999 16:02, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

Singles

• Considering this section is dedicated to singles from the album, having links to their articles wouldn't be overlinking in my opinion.
• "Oh Santa! needs a closing quote mark
• 'soared' sounds very encyclopedic, try rose.
  • If it's very encyclopaedic then what's the problem ;-)  — Calvin999 16:04, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

I swear I made the same typo when reviewing another of your GA's, glad you caught on! Azealia911 _talk

 Done  — Calvin999 16:04, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

Release and promotion

• "featuring her mother Patricia" which song featured her mother? All of them? One? Which one?
• "Of recording" → "On recording"
• Remove "and her pregnancy", it's irrelevant to the topic and opens up a whole other can of worms
• Unless every other country had a different release date to that of North America, remove "The album was also released on November 2 in Canada.[56]"

 Done  — Calvin999 18:38, 22 September 2015 (UTC)

Critical reception

• Is the (Positive) and (Negative) ratings in the infobox WP:OR?
  • Not really. They didn't give star ratings, so I have to judge the tone of them in order to say positive or negative.  — Calvin999 18:41, 22 September 2015 (UTC)
• The infobox used BBC Music, the prose uses BBC, use one.
• "which indicates 'mixed or average'" Mixed or average what?
• "echoed Lamb's sentiments" How? After reading what you say about the two, I'm not seeing anything that connects them, except for the fact that they both liked the album.
  • Lamb said "relaxed, comfortable" and "engaging", and Guerra said "unpretentious, unfussy and joyous". They both praised it using synonyms  — Calvin999 18:41, 22 September 2015 (UTC)
• "gave a mixed review of the album" → "gave the album two and a half stars in his review"

 Done  — Calvin999 18:41, 22 September 2015 (UTC)

Commercial performance

• "most top ten entries" needs a comma after entries.
• "It also peaked" → "The album also peaked"

 Done  — Calvin999 08:19, 22 September 2015 (UTC)

Charts

• Charts → Charts and certifications
• Either use {{Albumchart}} or at least make the listings look the same as your other current GA nomination (EG add chart providers).
• Why do certifications come before year-end charts?

 Done  — Calvin999 08:26, 22 September 2015 (UTC)

References

• I'm seeing italic marks in some references, but not in all that are needed, if you want to remove them all to comply with the citation rule, fine, if not, there's a couple of corrections. However, some of the errors are not concerning such marks.

• #2 — Billboard should be in italics.
• #6 — HitFix shouldn't be in italics.
• #15 — Shobiz411 should be unlinked and un-italicized
• #24 — Needs an accessdate.
  • There is one in the template. Click edit and have a look.  — Calvin999

It could be because you're calling for a cite web and providing no url, why is that? Azealia911 _talk 09:46, 22 September 2015 (UTC)

Ah yeah. I left it out because it would accept the URL, but the article is needed for that info.  — Calvin999 10:05, 22 September 2015 (UTC)

I'm confused, will you be providing a URL or not? Azealia911 _talk 10:06, 22 September 2015 (UTC)

No because Examiner.com is deemed not allowed, but I need this source for the info provided, and it says that sources can be used if blocked if absolutely necessary.  — Calvin999 10:26, 22 September 2015 (UTC)

• #29 — Allmusic → AllMusic
• #33 — Unlink BBC
• #34 — Unlink PopEater
• #40 — Unlink Billboard
• #41 — Why is the date in italics?
• #52 — Unlink 7digital
• #53 — Link Amazon.com
• #57 — Unlink Idolator
• #58 — The Daily Mail is notoriously unreliable.
  • I'm just using it as confirmation that she was there, and there are pictures to back that up. I personally don't think Daily Mail is unreliable.  — Calvin999
• #85 — Needs an accessdate.

 Done  — Calvin999 08:37, 22 September 2015 (UTC)

Everything else seems fine, will get to the other sections shortly. Azealia911 _talk 09:46, 22 September 2015 (UTC) Done everything. Thank you.  — Calvin999 16:04, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

• Passing Azealia911 _talk 16:06, 24 September 2015 (UTC)
  • Thank you.  — Calvin999 16:18, 24 September 2015 (UTC)