Talk:Micah Joseph Lebensohn/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Kavyansh.Singh in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 14:11, 26 October 2021 (UTC)
Nominator: Ploni (talk · contribs) at 13:51, 26 October 2021 (UTC)
I'll attempt to review this. Comments soon. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:11, 26 October 2021 (UTC)
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edit- Mention in the prose the date of his birth and death.
- In the biography section, we start by writing about his teenage:
As a teenager, Lebensohn, ...
, then we move back to age 12,and began to translate poetry into Hebrew at the age of twelve ...
, then back to teenage:At the age of sixteen he...
. Make it chronological. By the late 1840s, Lebensohn discovered the first symptoms of tuberculosis.
– Not sure what "first symptom" is. Better to write it as "early symptoms of tuberculosis"he attended the philosphy lectures of Schelling at the university
– Is it a typo, or you intended to write is as "philosphy", not "philosophy". Also, suggesting to rephrase as "he attended the philosphy/philosophy lectures of Schelling at the Humboldt University of Berlin"'Prayer, Daughter of Hearts.'
– full stop outside the single quotation (MOS:QUOTEMARKS) Please correct me if I am wrongamong other works.[11][5]
– Ref 5 should be before 11.on the death of M. A. Günzburg.[11][7]
– Same as above. 7 should be before 11.In the Jewish Encyclopedia (1904), Herman Rosenthal and Peter Wiernik [Wikidata] write that
– "[...] wrote that"- File:Micha Josef Lebensohn.jpg – How can we claim that the author died 70 years ago, when we don't know who the author is? When was it first published.
- Rest seems fine. Nice work! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:50, 26 October 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks for the feedback! I've made the suggested improvements. –Ploni (talk) 15:58, 26 October 2021 (UTC)
Thanks! Happy to pass then. Good work! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 16:08, 26 October 2021 (UTC)
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