Talk:Michael Chopra/GA1
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Reviewer: MPJ-DK (talk · contribs) 23:07, 2 March 2016 (UTC)
About to start the review, full disclosure I am aWiki Cup and a GA Cup participant. If anyone would like to reciprocate I have my own GAN (Mexican National Trios Championship). MPJ-US 23:07, 2 March 2016 (UTC)
First things first, going through the GA Toolbox
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Apparently "lbs" should not have the "s"
- I am assuming British Spelling and will keep that in mind as I review the article
- Copyvio Detector
- Shows "Highly Unlikely" at a max of 28% so we're good there
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Source 41 is dead- Replaced Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 09:05, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
The following sources have a change to the url from the original, you may want to consider updating them to prevent future link rot. Looks like BBC changed how their website was working at some point after these sources were added4, 5, 18, 19, 20, 21, 22, 33, 36, 39, 40, 42, 45, 57, 60, 62, 65, 64, 66, 59, 74, 81, 79, 75, 77, 82, 86, 85
- I dont think any alteration is required. RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 09:05, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
- Since that was a suggestion only that's not a problem for the GA review.
More to come, sources, images are next on my check list. MPJ-US 23:24, 2 March 2016 (UTC)
Images
edit- licenses and all check out, no problems.
Sources
editWhat is the Reliable source status of the following sites
soccerbase.comfootball-league.co.uksoccerway.com
- We consider non user generated sites like soccerway and soccerbase as reliable sources. Rarely are any mistakes or discrepencies are found. Soccerbase covers entire British football system, and additionally Soccerway covers leagues of countries like Malaysia, Indonesia, India. Most of the GAs use them (ex Hatem Ben Arfa, Michael Ingham, Nuno Mendes (footballer), Paul Robinson (footballer, born 1979), Neville Southall, Josh Walker, Fernando Torres, Mathieu Valbuena. Ryan Burge and even FA like Thierry Henry). Soccerbase is very reliable for England and Scottish leagues. RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 09:29, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
- Looking at the various GAs I am satisfied with those souces.
Reference 9 needs to list BBC- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 10:23, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
Consistency please - some citations list "BBC Sport" others "BBC Sport"- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 10:23, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
- Reference 37 does not list details on the website/publisher
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:59, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
- 38 - Same as above
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:59, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
- Very few reference lists the date, only the accessdate, if the article lists a date it should be listed in the citation.
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- "was named on the PFA Team of the Year" - "named on" sounds weird to me, is that a common way to phrase this sort of achievement?
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:59, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
- "during the peak of his football career" - judgement call on "peak of his career" and the term peak is not used when discussing this later in the article.
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:59, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
- "Newcastle were handed a 3–1 defeat" should be "was handed", the club is singular.
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:59, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
- "included his four goals against Burnley", remove "his"
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:59, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
- "Indian club Mohun Bagan were interested" again, singular so "was"
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:59, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
- "Newcastle loaned Chopra to Nottingham Forest in February 2004 for a month." should be reworded to something along the lines of "Newcastle loaned Chopra to Nottingham Forest for a month in February 2004."
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:59, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
- "3–1 win away to Slovakian side Dubnica" - I am not sure what this sentence is trying to express
- Done Europa League is played on a two leg basis, the two teams play both in each of the team's home. So away here means match was played in Slovakian side's home ground.RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:59, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
- "he opened the scoring on the fourth minute" should be "in the fourth"
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:59, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
- "find the net after coming for fifteen seconds" modify to "finding the next fifteen seconds after coming into the game" or words to that effect.
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:59, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
- "In April, it was reported that Chopra's possibility of missing the rest of the season after being affected with mumps" please rephrase this. Also, did he actually miss anything? if he did not then this is just a throwaway detail that really does not matter in the big picture.
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- "with his claiming it to be the "worst injury" he had ever had.", should be "which he claimed to be the "worst injury" he had ever had" or words to that effect.
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- Typo "frustated"
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- and wh is "frustated" in quotations?
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- "About the transfer, he commented that he "had shown" his "loyalty to the football club", hoping that they would reciprocate the same" please revise.
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- "Chopra scored twenty two goals in forty four matches" should be 22 and 44
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- First time the abbreviation "PFA" is used it should be explained
- Done In the lead it is linked, and when used in the article for the first time, I have explained.RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- "Post match" should be "post-match"
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- "with Sky Sports writing of Chopra destroying Derby" not sure what the article is trying to convey here.
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- "next season with the club", replace "the club" with Cardiff City
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- "After his recovery, he came to action" - came to action? Also was he out 10-12 weeks or what?
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- "only his shot to be deflected by Reading captain Matt Mills" - "only for his shot to be"
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- typo "undiclosed"
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- "type of player" the club was searching" missing "for". also why is "type of player" in quotations?
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- Same with "hungry" and "bang"?
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- "He also found the net twice, each in his two games against his former club Cardiff City.", poor sentence structure, not sure if I really know what this is supposed to mean.
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- Typo "topscorer" is not one word
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- " he was nor in his plans for going "forward"" - probably should be "not" and why is "forward" in quotations?
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- ""they were "free to look for another club"" Who are they?
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- the "winner" goal - quotation question again
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- "Though he was close to sign for Barnsley" should be "close to signing with"
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- "that the "Blackpool move" was a "fresh start" for him" - again with the quotation signs
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- "20 appearances, but failed" does not need the comma
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- "was scrapped by an injury" - Cut short? ended by?
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- more quotation mark highjinx in "where he "managed two shots on goal""
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:30, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- " dual citizenship means Chopra cannot ", the word "means" is not needed
- Done RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 10:23, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
- @Royroydeb: - I believe that is the full review for now. putting it on hold pending updates, hopefully updates will start within 7 days. MPJ-US 03:20, 4 March 2016 (UTC)
I believe you have addressed all listed issues, I will do one final read-through to make sure no other issues are present MPJ-US 18:26, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
- Looking over it again I fixed two minor issues. I am satisfied that this is a Good Article. cpngratulations MPJ-US 18:34, 9 March 2016 (UTC)