Talk:Michel Vaillant/GA1

GA Review

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Well-written?

There are many problems here. The article needs a thorough copy-edit for grammar. Some examples of types of problems are below.

Recurring problems

• Hyphenation. "Non fictional", for example, should be hyphenated. "real-cars" should not.
• Typos. E.g., "The pilote without a face"
• Too many sentences start with "There is" or "there are". This is wordy. Example: "There are many commercial products based on the series" could be "Many commercial products are based on the series."
• Problems with verb tense. E.g., "This game has ranked first in the auto racing video games in Benelux,[25] and reach top downloads on commercial websites" and "The series have fans throughout several countries".
• Other problems. "The series is very popular among fans of automobile, for featuring real cars".

Other comments

• "It has almost fans in France and Belgium, including Dutch-speaking Belgium, for Michel Vaillant albums have been translated very soon in Dutch" I'm not sure what this sentence means.
• Why are the titles called "albums"?
• Section "Some Breton in an album" is too short and is puzzlingly titled. "Albums in English" is also too short and should just be part of the "Publications" section.

Verifiable?

• Lead should not have a "citation needed" tag.
  • Fixed, reliable source found for info. Fram (talk) 13:57, 4 June 2009 (UTC)

Broad?

• Most citations are to MichelVaillant.com. What makes this a reliable source?
• A search for Michel Vaillant on Google Books brings up a couple of sources you don't seem to have used. They might be useful in fleshing out your discussion.

Neutral?

OK here.

Stable?

OK here.

Images?

• File:Michelvaillant01.JPG needs more explanation on the image page as to why it enhances readers' understanding.
• So does File:Michel Vaillant.jpg
• So does File:MichelvaillantF1.jpg
• So does File:Michel Vaillant affiche.jpg

Here's an example of an image with a good Fair Use Rationale: File:ND1tsotoc.JPG

On hold

I'm putting the article on hold for a week. Ricardiana (talk) 19:46, 31 May 2009 (UTC)

I'm checking in briefly with a question. Why is Boz the nominating editor when the article's revision history shows that s/he has never edited this article, even once? Ricardiana (talk) 17:32, 5 June 2009 (UTC)

Fram asked me to nominate, and so I did. :) BOZ (talk) 19:32, 5 June 2009 (UTC)

I see that some cleanup work has been done; what remains? I'll see what I can do, though I am not in the least bit familiar with the subject. BOZ (talk) 19:34, 5 June 2009 (UTC)

I did some some grammar fixing on the first three sections - there was a bit of repetition that I removed and some data that I placed elsewhere. I also broke the text into smaller paragraphs. I could run through the whole article maybe by next weekend.

--Scott Free (talk) 03:08, 8 June 2009 (UTC)

Thanks, Scott! BOZ (talk) 03:57, 8 June 2009 (UTC)

Verdict

I am failing the article for now, for reasons detailed below. Feel free to request a GAR or re-nominate the article later.

I realize that people are working and plan to work on the article. However, the on hold process is only supposed to last a week, and a fail now does not prevent either re-assessment or re-nomination. In addition, the article has not been worked on by either the nominating editor, Boz, or Fram, the editor who asked Boz to nominate. Next time, issues can be resolved more quickly by having a nominating editor who is involved in the project and watches the page.

Reasons for fail:

1. While the article has been cleaned up by Scott Free, it still needs a thorough copy-edit. In particular, I notice that problems with verb tense still remain - that's unacceptable for a Good Article.
2. The images' FURs have been modified, but (with the exception of the one in the infobox) not enough. Specifically, they need to indicate how readers' understanding is enhanced.

Ricardiana (talk) 20:18, 9 June 2009 (UTC)

Michael Valiant - Mach 2

We just finished doing a pitstop and giving a wicked tune-up on MV - so the article is all revved up and raring to ride on the next leg of the GA Grand Prix...

--Scott Free (talk) 15:33, 13 June 2009 (UTC)