Talk:Mike Tyson's tattoos/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MaxnaCarta (talk · contribs) 11:04, 14 May 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

   b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a. (reference section):

   b. (citations to reliable sources):

   c. (OR):

   d. (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a. (major aspects):

   b. (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

   b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

1: Prose & MoS

• The American former boxer Mike Tyson at beginning of lead, can we remove "the"?
• I'd like to have Marxist and communist linked, but it would end up a WP:SEAOFBLUE so probably best unlinked
• Clifton Brown in The New York Times describes the Ashe tattoo as "a contradiction" with Tyson's "fits of rage" describe or described? Idk. Describe is active. I always come up with this issue myself when writing. ie: Sock v SPI WAS a decision of the Court/IS a decision of the court? Is it still? Was it? School me on this one because I am tired of asking myself which one is correct.
• Could we change When Tyson got the face tattoo, he agreed in writing that all drawings, artwork, and photographs of it belonged to Whitmill's Paradox-Studio of Dermagraphics, an uncommon step in the tattoo industry to Tyson took an unusual step in the tattoo industry when he agreed in writing, prior to getting the face tattoo, that all sketches, artwork, and photographs of it belonged to Whitmill's Paradox-Studio of Dermagraphics.. Just think it flows better
• Nimmer's declaration was then excluded because it was legal opinion could be Nimmer's declaration was then excluded because it was a legal opinion

   Done Sure

• On June 6, Warner Bros. told the court that, in the event the dispute was not resolved, it would alter the appearance of the tattoo in the movie's home release; on June 20 it announced a settlement with Whitmill under undisclosed terms I would love to lose the semi-colon, have a full stop and capitalise On. I hate semi-colons.

  I like them; but agree in this case;  Done.

• which reflect a person's genealogy change to reflects.

   Partly done. Changed ta mōkō (the style) to mōkō (the tattoo, plural in this context), as more accurate; left "reflect" as a result.

• Did not know "precedential" was an adjective but it apparently is! A short explanation as to what precedent is may be required for comprehension criteria if progressing to FA, but not needed got GA

   Added quote from King to foonote, elaborating slightly.

• They furthermore argued I'd change to Further

   Done Sure

2b&c: Reliable sources & original research

• [10] Y
• [26] Y
• [32] Y
• [43] Y
• [63] Y

2d: Copyvio

• Fine, only red flags are copy/pasted quotes which are used appropriately and cited as required

3: Breadth & focus

• Seems fairly broad in coverage. Nothing major omitted.

Tamzin, while I have noted some issues during the review, none of these in my opinion actually are a barrier to passing the core editorial standards for GA criteria. So, it's up to you which of the prose changes you make, if any. Once you are finished, please ping me and we are good to go on this one. Great work and I learned a few tricks such as "quoting in" for a reference.— MaxnaCarta  ( 💬 • 📝 ) 07:17, 15 May 2023 (UTC)

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