Talk:Mike Wingfield/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 05:06, 8 August 2023 (UTC)

Looks interesting! I will review this within a week. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 05:06, 8 August 2023 (UTC)

Thanks for the fun read! It is always wonderful to see articles from SA as well as Africa in general. I have now placed this article on hold and left my comments below. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 16:35, 10 August 2023 (UTC)

@LunaEatsTuna see my response in green below. Most of the issues are resolved now (pending your verification)

Glad you enjoyed the article FuzzyMagma (talk) 17:40, 10 August 2023 (UTC)

Awesome work! I am really pleased with how you cleaned up § Research. I can now pass this article for GA status. Congrats! ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 20:25, 11 August 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio check

Earwig says good to go.

Prose

• In the lead, I would wikilink academic as some readers may not know what it means.
• "over 1000 scientific" – should be either 1 000 or 1,000.Y
• "a Master of Science in plant pathology" – wikilink plant pathology here and unlink its mention later in this subsection. Y
• "Plant Protection Research Institute, Stellenbosch University, in 1979" – recommend "Plant Protection Research Institute of Stellenbosch University in 1979" in this context for improved flow. Y
• "Harvard Business School in 2008" – recommend "Harvard Business School in Boston, Massachusetts in 2008" for clarity. Y
• "At the Plant Protection Research Institute" – change to "While working at the Plant Protection Research Institute". Y
• "In 1990, he" – recommend using Wingfield here. Y
• "was promoted to full professor" – what is a 'full professor'? It is different than just saying 'professor' here?

they are the same, removed full

• "as a Professor" – should be lowercase here. Y
• Do the sources say when CFTPP was established?

no but found one that does

• "He worked on several" – should probably be "He has worked on several". Relatedly: Y
• The rest of the paragraph feels quite promotional in tone, particularly words like "throughout the globe". For instance, "He and his students have added new understanding about various pathogens," can be made more neutral like "He, along with his students, has contributed novel insights regarding various pathogens,". And instead of writing "have a significant impact", explain instead how and what impact exactly was made. Feel free to ask for help with this; though, I am not quite familiar with the biological terminology to reword this.

reworded and trimmed this section.

• "Wingfield is an international expert" – just "expert" is fine.
• "plants, health with" – do you mean "plant health, with"?

it should have been "'" and not ","

• It should be "National Science and Technology Forum-South32's Special Annual …" for consistency with the formatting of the other awards. Y

Refs

Passes spotcheck on refs 2, 11, 20, 25, 32 and 38.

• Ref 3 appears to be a dead URL.

replaced with a PDF version saved on FABI website

• Ref 24 does not refer to him as an international expert, but implementing my above comment will address this.

yup resolved

• Ref 31 does not mention Mike Wingfield from what I can see.

it does not i think I confused Mike with “Mr Edward” especially with the picture at the end of the article (Mike is at the left). I removed the sentence.

Others

• Recommend adding Template:use dmy dates (optional) Y
• Recommend adding Template:use X English (optional) Y

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