Talk:Mino Raiola/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Paul Vaurie (talk · contribs) 00:53, 11 March 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Kimikel (talk · contribs) 02:58, 14 October 2024 (UTC)

@Paul Vaurie: Hello, I've reviewed this article as part of the October GA backlog drive. Please see my review below. If you have any questions or concerns regarding my suggestions, or will not be able to implement them in a timely manner, please let me know. Thank you. Kimikel (talk) 02:58, 14 October 2024 (UTC)

@Kimikel: Thanks for the review. I'll get on this in the coming days, give or take three to four days hopefully. Thanks for the review! Paul Vaurie (talk) 04:47, 14 October 2024 (UTC)

@Kimikel: Everything has been resolved as suggested. Paul Vaurie (talk) 07:01, 17 October 2024 (UTC)

@Paul Vaurie: I've finished my final review of the page; I believe there's nothing else to comment on at this point. Thank you for all of your work. I'm now going to close this review, congratulations! Kimikel (talk) 04:04, 18 October 2024 (UTC)

Well-written

Lead

• "who achieved the best" > who sought the best

Early life

• "Growing up in the Netherlands, his father established a chain of pizzerias, where Raiola spent his younger years, first washing dishes in an attempt to grow closer to his father, and later as a waiter." > In the Netherlands, his father established a chain of pizzerias. There, Raiola spent his younger years, first washing dishes in an attempt to grow closer to his father, and later as a waiter.
• "later as the clubs'" > later the club's

Agency career

• "Zeman wanted a player" > Zeman requested from Raiola a player
• "this made transfers and player contracts more important" > transfers and player contracts became
• "and therefore meant agents were more necessary" > and agents became more necessary
• "and was the player" > and Nedvěd was the player
• "Raiola sold the template of Nedved, an "extremist" who "can train harder than you can imagine", to several players throughout his career." > this sentence is unclear, are you saying he applied that description to multiple players?
• "Nedved" > Nedvěd
• "resulting in a commission" > received a commission
• "In 2008, he was involved" > merge this sentence with another paragraph so this sentence doesn't stand alone
• "Capone, for €9 million" > Capone for €9 million
• "revoking" > revocation

Reputation

• "who labelled him" > who labelled Raiola
• "Paul Scholes, and" > Paul Scholes and
• "that as "a person" > that "as a person
• "the "pizza-maker" was formed" > a "pizza-maker" formed
• "based on a description by Dutch journalist Thijs Slegers of "Mafioso"." > after Dutch journalist Thijs Slegers called Raiola a "mafioso".
• "opting not to wear fancy clothing." > as he opted to not wear fancy clothing.
• "had "no traces of luxury" " > had only four employees and "no traces of luxury",
• "Selection of past clients" > Notable clients

Verifiable

Spot check

1. 33: Verified
2. 49: Verified
3. 21: missing author
4. 22: missing author
5. 56: missing most of the information needed

Broad

• Broad in its coverage

Neutral

• Neutral

Illustrated

• Image meets criteria

Stable

• Stable

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