Talk:Monica (song)

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:24, 29 July 2022 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will review this one today! --K. Peake 09:24, 29 July 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• The recording is dated as sometime between those separate dates, so remove it from the infobox

• Done.

• Mention in the first sentence that is from their sixth studio album, The Kinks Are the Village Green Preservation Society (1968).

• Done.

• Move the recording info to the writing and serenade sentence, adding after the comma with "the song was recorded..."

• Done.

• Swap the lyrics and rhythm sentences for the correct order

• Done.

• "Its recording features" → "The song features"

• Done.

• "are partly inspired by Dylan Thomas's radio drama" → "were partly inspired by Dylan Thomas's radio drama,"

• Done.

Background and composition

• Quote box looks good!
• Wikilink love song

• Done.

• Should you write radio ban or simply ban since BBC Radio follows this part?

• Changed to simply "ban".

• Merge the first para with the second one per overly short size

• Done.

• "and he later directly referenced" → "with him later directly referencing"

• I think the original is probably better, as the reword introduces a WP:PLUSING issue, no?

• Remove comma after 1968 album

• Done.

• "by another Under Milk Wood character," → "by fellow Under Milk Wood character"

• Done.

• ""morning to moonshine."" → ""morning to moonshine"." per MOS:QUOTE

• Done.

• Change the beginning of the first sentence to "Musically, "Monica" is a calypso" either using song or track, depending on what is appropriate

• Done.

• "serious songwriting, and compares" → "serious songwriting and compares"

• Done.

• "thinks its calypso rhythm" → "thinks the calypso rhythm"

• Done.

Recording and release

• Remove wikilink on the Kinks

• Done.

• Wikilink Bass guitar

• Done.

• "for BBC radio on" → "for BBC Radio on"

• Done.

• "and kept it on" → "and kept the song on"

• Done.

• "he changed its planned sequence" → "he changed the planned sequence"

• Done.

• "was an example of" → "is an example of"

• Done.

• "take him seriously."" → "take him seriously"." per MOS:QUOTE

• Done.

• Make the last para into a sub-section, titled Legacy

• A three sentence section seems like MOS:OVERSECTION to me.

• "ranking of the album's songs." → "ranking of the songs."

• Done.

• "Rogan considers both it" → "Rogan considers both the song"

• Done.

• "while Kitts instead counters" → "while Kitts counters" because the counters part is obviously saying he holds a different opinion

• Done.

• "through its theme of" → "with the theme of"

• Done.

Notes

• they date "Monica"'s recording → they date the recording

• Done.

References

• Copyvio score looks fabulous at 16.7%!!!

Sources

• Pipe Backbeat Books to UBM Technology Group

• Done.

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 10:19, 29 July 2022 (UTC)

• Thanks for another snappy review, Kyle Peake. Comments and responses above. Tkbrett (✉) 12:07, 29 July 2022 (UTC)

• ✓ Pass now, I understand why you did not implement two of those changes and I did some brief copy editing! --K. Peake 12:22, 29 July 2022 (UTC)