Talk:Monte Pearson/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by Royroydeb in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Royroydeb (talk · contribs) 08:52, 21 October 2013 (UTC) Hi,I will be reviewing this article.Reply
In the lead,

  • Its useless to write " who played ten seasons"
  • "with the organization" - it is absolutely horrid.Its a "club" or a "team" but not an "organization"
  • I will be doing the rest tomorrow.RRD13 (talk) 08:52, 21 October 2013 (UTC)Reply

    That's baseball terminology. Under WP:GACN, the reviewer should not impose their "own stylistic preferences or national variety of English on the article text." Just because I'm not using football terminology, doesn't mean it's incorrect. I used both these wordings in Neal Ball and George Nicol (baseball), and both were passed by the reviewers. Heck, even Mariano Rivera, one of the best baseball FA, utilizes the term "organization." —Bloom6132 (talk) 14:13, 21 October 2013 (UTC)Reply

    Early Life

    • Maybe sprinkle some information about his parents.
    • Sorry, but I've consulted approximately 75 sources and none of them mention anything about his parents. I hope this won't detract from the article, as excessive personal details about relatives is kinda trivial. —Bloom6132 (talk) 16:12, 22 October 2013 (UTC)Reply
    • "He later moved to Fresno, California" is mentioned but where he lived before is not mentioned

    RRD13 (talk) 08:35, 22 October 2013 (UTC) Professional careerReply

    New York Yankees

  • The two sides eventually agreed to a contract worth $13,500.-A reference can be useful

    • The ref 1 footnote in the sentence immediately following the one above cites both the contract and his stats.

    Cincinnati Reds

  • [the Reds] , [them]-It should have this "()" brackets

  • Personal Life

  • He re-married to Nellie,-How it is possible?He was married to Cleo Wimer so how he can remarry another woman?
  • Same thing [] here also
  • RRD13 (talk) 06:37, 24 October 2013 (UTC)Reply
    Now its perfect for GA status RRD13 (talk) 17:33, 24 October 2013 (UTC)Reply