Talk:Monte Pearson/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Royroydeb (talk · contribs) 08:52, 21 October 2013 (UTC) Hi,I will be reviewing this article.
In the lead,

Its useless to write " who played ten seasons"

"with the organization" - it is absolutely horrid.Its a "club" or a "team" but not an "organization"

I will be doing the rest tomorrow.RRD13 (talk) 08:52, 21 October 2013 (UTC)

That's baseball terminology. Under WP:GACN, the reviewer should not impose their "own stylistic preferences or national variety of English on the article text." Just because I'm not using football terminology, doesn't mean it's incorrect. I used both these wordings in Neal Ball and George Nicol (baseball), and both were passed by the reviewers. Heck, even Mariano Rivera, one of the best baseball FA, utilizes the term "organization." —Bloom6132 (talk) 14:13, 21 October 2013 (UTC)

Early Life

• Maybe sprinkle some information about his parents.

• Sorry, but I've consulted approximately 75 sources and none of them mention anything about his parents. I hope this won't detract from the article, as excessive personal details about relatives is kinda trivial. —Bloom6132 (talk) 16:12, 22 October 2013 (UTC)

• "He later moved to Fresno, California" is mentioned but where he lived before is not mentioned

• He lived in Oakland beforehand. He was born there, grew up there and then moved to Fresno sometime before his middle/high school years. —Bloom6132 (talk) 16:12, 22 October 2013 (UTC)

RRD13 (talk) 08:35, 22 October 2013 (UTC) Professional career

• Since Cleveland Indians paragraph contains information about his demotion to minor leagues, the heading can be renamed.RRD13 (talk) 05:17, 23 October 2013 (UTC)

• That's not necessary. As per Derek Jeter and Mariano Rivera FAs, the "Minor leagues" section is to describe his time in the minors before he gets promoted to the major leagues for the first time. After that, there's no need to mention any demotions back to the minors in the title. —Bloom6132 (talk) 18:30, 23 October 2013 (UTC)
  

New York Yankees

The two sides eventually agreed to a contract worth $13,500.-A reference can be useful

• The ref 1 footnote in the sentence immediately following the one above cites both the contract and his stats.

Cincinnati Reds

[the Reds] , [them]-It should have this "()" brackets

• I thought square brackets were permitted per MOS. —Bloom6132 (talk) 07:58, 24 October 2013 (UTC)

Personal Life

He re-married to Nellie,-How it is possible?He was married to Cleo Wimer so how he can remarry another woman?

• He was married to Cleo Wimer, divorced her, and then re-married – to Nellie. He didn't remarry Nellie, he remarried to her. —Bloom6132 (talk) 07:58, 24 October 2013 (UTC)

Same thing [] here also

• See above. —Bloom6132 (talk) 07:58, 24 October 2013 (UTC)

RRD13 (talk) 06:37, 24 October 2013 (UTC)
Now its perfect for GA status RRD13 (talk) 17:33, 24 October 2013 (UTC)