Talk:Mount Bailey (Oregon)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ironholds (talk) 23:30, 16 January 2010 (UTC)

Lead

• "located opposite Mount Thielsen from Diamond Lake " - could this be clarified?
• "snowcat skiing" - needs to be inlined
• "hiking trail gives foot access to Bailey's summit.[5]" - you've got a reference here. Leads should be all referenced or not referenced at all minor quotes (so either reference, or unreference that line!)
• "a source of medicine (healing) " - as opposed to non-healing medicine? :P
• "It was considered a sacred place to them and a source of medicine (healing) where spiritual leaders would hold feasts and prayer vigils on the summit.[6]" - "It was considered a sacred place to them and a source of medicine (healing), with spiritual leaders holding feasts and prayer vigils on the summit.[6]"
• The lead is split into teeny, tiny paragraphs; suggest extending, or combining into one paragraph.

Name origin

• Suggest changing the title to "etymology"

Geography and geology

• Paragraphs are too disparate.

• "... the two are almost equal in appearance" - what is this line trying to say? The mountains very much do not resemble one another. They are, however, on opposite sides of the lake and are both shield volcanoes, but there the resemblance ends Eridax700 (talk) 22:57, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

Ecology

• Too short for a full paragraph. Can you expand it?

Recreation

• Too short for a full paragraph. Can you expand it? Ironholds (talk) 23:30, 16 January 2010 (UTC)

Concerns addressed. ceranthor 14:30, 17 January 2010 (UTC)

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